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Down past the meadow is the grand old hotel. Where statues of marble encircle the ponds Tall cypress line up like soldiers at arms, saluting each limo that comes down the hill Limousines arrive daily, like vultures of prey, to stop and eject their catch of the day There is proof on arrival, of fortune and assets. Hosts greet each guest, as the day stretches on, sporting long coat-tails and red satin vests As we watched from our hillside, from a vast world away, we're inclined to walk down, to take a survey Too rich for our blood! We are flooded with awe Yet, we're drawn to peek in. Where the rich wine and dine and we will try, most discreetly, to blend into grey. Alabaster stone gates, and the thick sculptured stairs are reeking affluence, that we'll never share __ Heading back to our campground, on the river's west side, we returned to our tent, tucked under the pines It's been faded by sunlight, patched together with twine Where contentment is canvas, and the wind is a song, and where water makes music, and the breeze is a poem Our belongings are in order, (in a disorderly way) A camp-stove, a lantern, for the end of the day A tent, (army surplus)…. and a stack of dry wood will add to our comfort, as well as it should Would we want to change places, if ever we tried? Would we trade all our moonscapes, or the chipmunks, or tunes? As we sat by the fire, to remember our day We have watched the bright embers, as they floated away Pinpricks of fire that mixed with the stars We've been granted our millions, ….while owning the sky. _________________________________________________________

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 4/3/2018 10:26:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your creative work. Way to go lady. Well, we would all like to have enough to live comfortably to not to excess. Congrats on your win. Sara
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Date: 3/31/2018 12:24:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. I could see the whole thing, wonderful imagery. Wanted to be around the camp with you!
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Date: 3/31/2018 5:42:00 AM
Congratulation son your big win. Well deserved, I think. I also prefer camping to mansions and true value to money. Many wishes, Kai
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Date: 3/30/2018 11:47:00 PM
Salutations, foursquare. Beautifully written with flair. This "millionaire" must share, When we put our humble abode on the market late last July, we had two offers the next day and we signed the papers, Sept. 6th. ...while the $900,000 estate, three miles away, is still up for sale eight months later and no visible signs PENDING.
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Date: 3/30/2018 9:29:00 PM
Great write, Carrie, congratulations on your win! Have a wonderful Easter Hugs Eve
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Date: 3/30/2018 9:05:00 PM
Life in beautiful images in your poem ... Congratulations on your top win, Carrie ...
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Date: 3/30/2018 8:12:00 PM
Fantastic pen! Congrats!!
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Date: 3/30/2018 7:42:00 PM
I LOVE it! BIG congrats, Carrie! Janice
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Date: 3/30/2018 7:21:00 PM
What a surprising take on this challenge. Beautifully done, Carrie. Awesome poem. Congrats on your top win.
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Date: 3/30/2018 4:09:00 PM
Carrie, what a wonderful way you have used these two prompts of 'burlap and satin' to contrast the power of money with man-made, superfluous acquisitions against the fulfilling and comforting gifts of being one with nature. Congratulations on your well-deserved Trophy win! I am 'Faving' your poem! Hugs, Sandra
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/30/2018 5:06:00 PM
Thank you for your generous comment, Sandra. Your poem was wonderful, and I'm so glad to see you placed high as well. Thanks for your kindness!
Date: 3/30/2018 4:01:00 PM
This is excellent, Carrie! The contrast between the first and second parts of the poem is very striking. The ending is awesome. ~ Congratulations on placing first! Regards // paul
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/30/2018 5:05:00 PM
Thank you very much Paul. Your opinion means a lot to me :)
Date: 6/13/2016 7:53:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie: Nature's beauty is worth all the wealth in the world. A priceless sky. Love the way you write
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/30/2018 5:03:00 PM
What a lovely compliment, thank you Suzanne!!
Date: 6/10/2016 8:18:00 AM
Carrie, you've created a scene of beauty that tranquilly guides us through a lesson of what is truly valuable in life.
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Date: 6/9/2016 6:53:00 PM
this has a most wonderful MESSAGE in it, Carrie and that last line is a standout. One that you chose wisely to do to appeal to Timothy's love of nature. BIG congrats.
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Date: 6/9/2016 2:54:00 PM
Beautiful poem! "owning the sky" is superb! congrats Carrie!
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Date: 6/9/2016 10:21:00 AM
Hi Carrie. Congrats for your top placement with this awesome piece!! ;-)
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Date: 6/9/2016 8:01:00 AM
I so enjoyed this one. Congratulations.
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Date: 6/9/2016 7:40:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie, wonderful rhythm in your storytelling. Most deserving high placement...
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Date: 6/9/2016 12:27:00 AM
An incredibly engrossing narrative, quite vivid in its vision. One can be so much richer in the surrounding of a breathtaking starlit night versus material wealth. Having gone 80 miles through the Saw-tooth Mountains, I can say I've felt that last line deeply. Congrats on 2nd place! Come check out my blog, if you get the chance, and tell me about your poem :)
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Date: 6/4/2016 2:28:00 PM
Carrie, I have missed your writing for it is breathtakingly beautiful. The question you pose is a very interesting one. Trade simplistic beauty for wealth and comfort. Your friend always, Michael
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Date: 6/1/2016 4:08:00 PM
I'm a happy camper, I'd stay on my side of the river. This was an enjoyable read, the thoughts and dreams of dreamers, with reflections from both sides. Good write Carrie :)
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