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The Magnetism of Our Union

Nice and slow, I feel you coming on Persistent, messy, though fragile You are over me, under me, beyond me Crushing my lingering patience, So that it no longer lingers, But putrefies And all the while, I feel you coming on Over me, under me, beyond me You know you have planned this muddle Organized, and poised, I did not take the bait I became the bait And you bit…by bliss you did bite I was so afraid that your teeth were going to shatter… Because I had been made by laboring stonemasons Who were trained to reduce the most radiant of rock into devil I was so hard-pressed in the ugliness Though in that moment, you sank in, and deeply…. Over me, under me, and beyond me You came onto me And all the devil slammed into my being dissipated Now I can barely stand without you……. The magnetism of our union continues to intensify For even patience has her prowl And her rot is built on our magnum opuses

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Date: 4/23/2015 8:58:00 PM
The destruction of Patience is so grotesque and emblematical of transformation. The nature of magnetism is electro gravity, this is also the physics of love as a natural force growing towards it's source. Love demands that we learn to support ourselves so that we can build with another my Gothic Princess. Patience for heart union should decompose into a fire of new action! The intrepid bite of desire is so sensuous in your description Laura...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/23/2015 9:34:00 PM
So pleased by your wise words, Justin. When true love collides, our character changes, often for the better. Even the most rotten of emotions can be built on something truly grand and divine. Glad you understand where I'm coming from. <3 <3 ~Laura
Date: 4/23/2015 1:38:00 PM
Statuesque Laura...loved the flow Tim
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/23/2015 9:25:00 PM
Statuesque, indeed! Glad you enjoyed, and thanks for the feedback! Always appreciated. ~Laura
Date: 4/23/2015 10:17:00 AM
I am so so impressed my dearest Laura! Such beauty in every line! Wish I could write such intensity and passion! 10+++ Love, Jack xxx
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/23/2015 9:26:00 PM
Love ya Jack. Your passion is different, unique and so so refreshing. Thanks for the visits! You're one sweet poet. <3 ~Laura
Date: 4/23/2015 8:36:00 AM
powerful what I can say more!! beautiful and the lines afire with intensity.. i like the repeating line.. :)!!//olive eloisa
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/23/2015 9:27:00 PM
I'm glad you can appreciate the repeating line. Thanks Olive; I am always happy for your input. ~Laura

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