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The Loch Ness Water

The Loch Ness water I went down by the lake, Stumbling across the rocks, My eyes fail to see if it was fake, Rocks made of blocks. What does my daddy do, He creeps up behind me, Slaps my head with his shoe Now I can see! Is that a monstrous branch? I opened my eyes fully wide, I swore the water’s became an avalanche, In a trench is now where I hide. The sun is getting hotter, I glimpse at it closer, still it's faraway, Whatever it is, it is in my water, I wash up the next day by the bay. A heavy rock, I lay under the shade, The world is not round, it is a block, I live now, not afraid. “I’m not afraid!" Scotland yard has nothing on me, Unforgettably Nessie was really me. Form: Classic Rhyme (20 lines or more) Contest: Adventure, art, confusion, fantasy, imagination Sandysandy@X@4@@?com

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Date: 1/30/2014 4:34:00 AM
kick ass imagery
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Date: 12/11/2013 2:08:00 AM
stopping by a second and third time................... xoxoxoxoxoox ;-)
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Date: 6/6/2012 6:57:00 PM
This certainly touches all the categories, Sandy. Glad you came out the winner with this piece! Best wishes, Mikki
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Date: 7/14/2011 8:18:00 PM
wow, this is sure imaginative. You are Nessie! Very interesting indeed. Congrats on your awesome win. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 7/13/2011 2:35:00 AM
Congratulations. Very cute. Lee
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Date: 7/12/2011 12:20:00 PM
Congratulations, Sandy! The last couple of lines really clinched it!
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Date: 7/12/2011 10:53:00 AM
Very cool way on how you ended this one, Sandy! Super duper congrats on your 1st place win ^_^
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Date: 7/12/2011 10:52:00 AM
Awesome, Sandy. I could feel the fear and angst of the "Loch Ness" inhabitant so well. Congratulations on your first place win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/12/2011 8:26:00 AM
Congrats on your first place win xxx
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Date: 7/12/2011 7:08:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place win :)
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Date: 7/12/2011 4:54:00 AM
congrats Sandy on your super first place win with this dazzling assignment luv.. enjoy the prize so well deserved luv..
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Date: 7/12/2011 4:40:00 AM
Congratulations Sandy on your win in the "Assignment" contest of P.D. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/12/2011 4:00:00 AM
My congratulations on the first place win in the contest, Sandy
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Date: 7/12/2011 12:44:00 AM
swinging cheers to you for the amazing award!! :) huggs
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Date: 7/11/2011 11:51:00 PM
Super congrats, for your first place win in my contest~ Also for the support.. I am so glad you did well on the second assignment i gave you... This poem was voted by Royal, myself and My poet friend and My sweetheart Nate D.,,, well he had hard time thinking of number ones..lol... thanks for your kind cute comment~ soup mail,..p.d.
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Date: 7/11/2011 11:53:00 PM
Is that a monstrous branch? I opened my eyes on fully wide, I swore the water became an avalanche, In a trench is now where I hide.... this verse got me....loved it...
Date: 7/11/2011 10:14:00 PM
great verse babe, xo, Don
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Date: 6/17/2011 5:19:00 PM
Poetry Assignment# Form: Heroic_Couplets Poetry ~~ Category: fantasy, business, childhood, and art ~ Title: * published smiles *
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Date: 6/17/2011 5:13:00 PM
agree with carolyn,,, p.d.
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Date: 6/17/2011 3:57:00 PM
If we do keep smiles on our faces, life is truly "pure quality," Sid. Enjoyed your poem. Best wishes, Carolyn
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