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I’m visiting the Manor with the paranormal society It’s said to be haunted; I’m filled with some anxiety The Duke was murdered, bringing his lover notoriety With bloodied hands she’s found guilty of impropriety The Manor is so spooky, at one time it looked so grand I startle as the door slams, my boyfriend holds my hand I shiver when the key turns, there’s something underhand Being locked in the old Manor wasn’t something I’d planned! The windows are all boarded up, I’m feeling quite unsure He tells me not to worry; we can exit from the back door Cobwebs hang from the ceiling, they’re something I abhor I wish I’d never agreed to go on this ghost hunting tour Members wander off in pairs to the renowned haunted zones Detection equipment is set up; to pick up creaks and groans We know we must be quiet and talk in such hushed tones Suddenly our hand held scanners pick up wails and moans The floorboards begin to creak; we hear footsteps in the hall A dust covered portrait of the Duke suddenly falls off the wall Hairs stand on the back of my neck and my skin starts to crawl I’ve come to the conclusion I don’t like ghost hunting after all! Tonight’s paranormal activity has given me such a dreadful fright We hurry down the staircase; my face has turned a ghastly white Our torches light up the entrance hall and to our great delight The huge wooden door swings open and we escape into the night! Sponsor Dear Heart Contest The Haunted House 8/23/18

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Date: 9/16/2018 8:03:00 PM
I'm a little late, Jan, great rhyme, imagery and story. Big congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve~`*
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Date: 9/5/2018 11:23:00 AM
Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest, wow what a story, I was hooked from word one, well done !
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Date: 9/1/2018 6:13:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on your win Jan. My favorite time of year...rain and all! : )
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Date: 9/1/2018 12:19:00 PM
Great write, Jan. Love the story. Congrats on your win! Hugs // Charrlie xx
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Date: 9/1/2018 11:58:00 AM
Wonderful write ,beautiful piece...Congrats great poet on your superb win in this contest...Kudos to you,pal...
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Date: 8/26/2018 3:38:00 PM
You are SO good at these kind of adventure writes, Jan. Good luck in the contest. I am sure this will do well. Best wishes, Gershon
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Date: 8/24/2018 4:01:00 PM
You have done extremely well with this version of a haunted house, Jan. I've got my entry ready for posting, but compared to yours it's on a lower level! Hugs // paul
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Date: 8/24/2018 1:14:00 PM
Such a scary haunted house, Jan, nicely done. Best of luck in the contest. John
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Date: 8/24/2018 2:59:00 PM
Thanks so much John, I am so busy at the moment I am hardly on soup and not writing much at present:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/23/2018 8:13:00 PM
Good luck in the contest, Jan. I like the idea of a haunted house, and this one is no exception.
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Date: 8/24/2018 12:17:00 PM
Thanks Caren its taken me ages to write for the contest am so busy at the moment I have little time on line:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 8/23/2018 3:56:00 PM
I only enjoy watching a ghost stories on T.V. Castles in Europe are often haunted and I would never stay at one. I wouldn't sleep all night. You wove a chilling tale in this entry Jan. I hope it does great in the contest! : )
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Date: 8/23/2018 4:36:00 PM
Thanks Connie, just seen the news of Hawaii, hoping and praying you all stay safe:-) hugs Jan xx

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