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Poetic Form: Suzette Prime

Inspired: 2023 December 03

Image: Does Fish See Water by Linkedln

So this is my world, eh? This is a square world. Triangle? Could it be a round ... okay? Do they call this flying ... no? I know that I'm not walking. What am I doing? I forgot. I do that a lot. Forget things. Oh well. I think I'll just swim. That's it! Swimming. I'm swimming. And all of this is water. Though it's weird. Water's free. Wide and free, It is not in this round ... bowl. Water makes noise constantly. They crash. They're called waves. They hit a thing called a beach. There are others just like me. Most differently. But alas! Something happens e'er so oft. I get lost ... My memory is as long as this bowl I swim in ...

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Date: 12/3/2023 4:24:00 PM
Very perceptive of the fish in his little bowl, a touch sad on the line 'there are others just like me' - such a dear little fish!
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Date: 12/3/2023 5:05:00 PM
Aloha, Michelle. Mom had alzheimers, didn't know her son for some years, I decided to paint her up a bit in lieu of her absent smiles--of that respect in search for answers, below to Tom, I found mom's other world--she was indeed, my dear little fish. With all of our Mahalo, William
Date: 12/3/2023 11:40:00 AM
Just shaddup and eat your fish flakes. Oh, and be sure to swim erratically to entertain us
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Date: 12/3/2023 3:43:00 PM
Sorry, & thanks for sharing + visit. Aloha William
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Date: 12/3/2023 3:42:00 PM
Your reaction same as me, 1st time volunteer read to severe alz & dement. patients, 3 men--git-go, no one to be in the rm @same time, just me & them, no intro just read but don't stop, so I read they yapped, read more, yapped more , it went on guessing 3 mins., I had enough, closed book, stood up & facing them--silence/realization set-in/welcome to our world/sat, read, my 1/2 hr time slot of yaps

Book: Shattered Sighs