The Ghost of My Lonely

Abandoned in the fifties after the war
A freight elevator stuck between floors
Obsolete machinery, splintered old chairs
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

Dead air presses down, stifling and thick
Something still dwells behind one of those bricks
Curled up in a ball, it waits for me there
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

A musty gray vapor that whispers my name
It seeps through the wall and creeps to my brain
It sighs and it groans as my soul is laid bare
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

It mumbles and moans and drones of ancient tombs
Of claustrophobic closets and dim, hollow rooms
I cry out for help, echoes answer my prayer
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

The ghost of my lonely, my lost and alone
My hopeless and helpless, my can't go back home
It's looking at me now with a dull, vacant stare
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

12345
Date: 9/26/2017 11:23:00 PM
Tim, this WINNING poem is REALLY gripping and skillfully-written! Janice
Login to Reply
Date: 9/26/2017 11:04:00 PM
Congratulations, Tim on your placement. This is a wonderful poem.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/26/2017 6:28:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Old buildings, abandoned hospitals, all have an eerie feel about them. You can sense it from the outside. I think maybe you refer to the homeless runaways in your poem even. This is a very good write and I like the repeating of the line.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/26/2017 4:35:00 PM
Tim, a wonderful and sort of creepy write, congratulations on your win !!
Login to Reply
Date: 9/26/2017 4:05:00 PM
Dammit Tim....this had me looking over my shoulder.....The repeated line is like an unseen door slamming behind the reader.....hastening his eyes to read quickly.....and get out fast.
Login to Reply
Date: 2/25/2017 12:55:00 AM
An amazing write, Tim...I got chills when reading it! Congrats on this win. I haven't seen around here or on FB. I hope you're doing well. Hugs, Rhonda
Login to Reply
Date: 2/23/2017 7:23:00 PM
Tim here I am again, maybe third time since you posted this golden oldie. Congrats again, dear friend and I hope you are doing well.
Login to Reply
Date: 2/22/2017 6:42:00 PM
Creepy and scary, and with the repeated line has the feeling of an old ballad. Congrats on your placement, Tim.
Login to Reply
Date: 2/22/2017 4:10:00 PM
Really well done, Tim - a smooth and powerful setting of mood.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/18/2016 1:45:00 AM
Tim, Congratulations on your sweet win. Thank you so much for the support. Stop by my blog "CERTIFYING OLD AGE (and a baby)" if you'd like. Always & Forever..... LINDA
Login to Reply
Date: 9/17/2016 1:08:00 AM
This caught my attention because of its form. I've never heard of it but it seems like something I'd like to try. Thank you.. Jenni
Login to Reply
Date: 6/8/2016 8:17:00 AM
Greetings Tim. Congrats for your well deserved first placement in the contest, with this awesome piece!! ;-)
Login to Reply
Date: 6/7/2016 12:54:00 PM
Congratulations, Tim, on your top place with your very atmospheric piece. Barry
Login to Reply
Date: 6/7/2016 10:22:00 AM
Congratulations Tim! Great write!
Login to Reply
Date: 6/7/2016 8:40:00 AM
Congratulations Tim, great piece...
Login to Reply
Date: 6/7/2016 7:26:00 AM
Congratulations on your top spot Tim.
Login to Reply
Date: 6/7/2016 5:49:00 AM
This is superb Tim! Congratulations on your first place deserving win! #7 ; )
Login to Reply
Date: 6/6/2016 11:09:00 PM
Congratulations! Enjoyed!
Login to Reply
Date: 6/6/2016 10:05:00 PM
Great write and congratulations!! Larry
Login to Reply
Date: 6/6/2016 9:36:00 PM
I had a feeling I read this before, the creepy sensation that covered me while I read was still as fresh as the first time. This is a fantastic write, thank you for entering it! ;)
Login to Reply
Date: 6/6/2016 7:36:00 PM
Great writing and a great win. Congratulations.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/6/2015 9:40:00 PM
I remember this from one of my previous contests and it was good to see it on the winner's list once again. This deserves to be there, Tim... I love atmospheric poems like this. The rhyming and rhythm of the poem is just excellent! Congrats on a great win!
Login to Reply
Date: 11/16/2015 9:14:00 PM
Hi Tim, you are so sweet. Happy to be on the same winning list. Congratulations. Love SKAT
Login to Reply
Date: 11/16/2015 12:36:00 PM
I would place this as a number one !! Excellent!! New or older poem.......it deserves to be read again
Login to Reply
Date: 11/16/2015 10:19:00 AM
Congrats Tim on the ghost of your lonely self in a warehouse in Newark or wherever!
Login to Reply
12345
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter