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7 Things You Didn't Know About a Zombie Apocalypse

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Poem written for "Pick a Line and Run With It Poetry Contest"

John Lawless, sponsor 4/30/2024

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The atmosphere was thick with souls whose identities were full of holes. The gathered outside my house filling in their blank spaces with anger, hatred, boredom, and despair. These zombies are not dead. They are on the left, right, everywhere in the swamp of our government in the aorta of Britian's parliament. They circulate like cuckoos, like cool fools, like inebriated hyenas, like improvised cretins, like malandrins, like dishonest bums, like mindless chatterboxes. They are not in the cemeteries. They are on the ground. They breathe like living beings. They walk like sore losers. They are remorseless. They are not humans. They are not dead They sleep under the trees at night under the oaks, under the mapou trees with the werewolves. By day, they stroll like vagabonds in shambles, like crazy foxes wandering around in offices and schools, on the beaches, and under the bridges. They are literally everywhere. They work in the Administration. They do not think much. They wreak havoc, troubles, and start wars due to actions, inactions, and exactions. How sad! Why do we keep silent? Do we not care? We say and do 'nichts,' nothing, 'nada.' We are all zombified, flouted, and baffled by the agents, by a way of life, by a system that destroys, punishes, and never is reconciled. We are imprisoned deep in the well We all sleep and walk, some by day others by night. Zombies are not dead. The gathered outside our houses are alive They are literally everywhere.

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Date: 4/30/2024 5:45:00 PM
what a surpriing universe an poem, i totally agree with the message,an "awesome " poem, thanks poet
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Date: 4/30/2024 5:10:00 PM
Your wonderful poem conveys a scary and distressing view of our culture, characterized by devastation and disillusionment, dear Sara. It serves as a wake-up call to confront the swarms of zombies in our midst while also providing a sobering glimpse into the horrible implications of society's foundations and actions. The image of souls with holes pervades all aspects of existence, evoking a sense of agony and release was so percent. A winning submission in my eyes.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/30/2024 5:29:00 PM
thank you, kind Sotto, for your sharing your insights into the meaning(s) within the lines of my poem. I don't typically write 'sobering.' Yet what I'm witnessing in today's word created some fears and distress for me....the prompt triggered all of my response. Who know for sure where some of my lines came from :-) It was a cathartic write, however. Thanks for your encouragement and suggesting my poem is a winning submission. I respect your views. Wishing you a wonderful evening, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
Date: 4/30/2024 3:57:00 PM
I really like this one Sara. I like the "no holds barred" writing in it, for example, the stanza that begins, "they circulate like cuckoos".
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/30/2024 5:26:00 PM
awww, thank you David...no holes barred writing isn't something I typically do...but I suppose I was just in that kind of mood :-) The prompt triggered some feelings and fears deep inside and out came the words :-) appreciate you and your visit. Have a great evening, Sara
Date: 4/30/2024 10:37:00 AM
A contemporary poem on civic life.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/30/2024 5:25:00 PM
thanks for your visit, Jay, and for your comments...appreciate you. Have a great evening, Sara
Date: 4/30/2024 8:02:00 AM
Dear Sara, your poem paints a vivid and haunting picture of a society inundated by a pervasive sense of emptiness and disillusionment. The imagery of souls filled with holes, gathering outside the speaker's house, and permeating every aspect of life evokes a chilling atmosphere of despair and resignation. Its a a poignant commentary on the dehumanizing effects of societal systems and behaviours, urging us to awaken from our collective slumber and confront the zombies that surround us.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/30/2024 5:25:00 PM
thanks for your in depth read of my poem, Silent One. You nailed my goals in writing this poem. I'm glad you found my imagery effective--chilling air with desperation and resignation. You got my message loud and clear & I'm grateful. Have a great evening, Sara

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