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The First Goodbye

laying in your bed watching you get dressed the permanent ring in the back pocket of your blue jeans i’m missing you already

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Chris Boskovski

Date: 9/1/2013 12:07:00 AM

Beautiful, simply beautiful Rachel! This is a great poem about missing your loved one and what you remember most about them! Great poem, keep on writing... I love it. :)

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 7/30/2013 1:24:00 AM

''the permanent ring in the back pocket''.For a certainty that had me thinking.I loved your poem,that line just drew me in.Nicely penned piece.

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 7/30/2013 1:23:00 AM

''the permanent ring in the back pocket''.For a certainty that had me thinking.I loved your poem,that line just drew me in.Nicely penned piece.

Rachel Blake
Date: 8/4/2013 10:33:00 AM

Thank you :) im glad you enjoyed it.

Poet Tacito

Date: 7/30/2013 12:18:00 AM

"Permanent ring in the back pocket", strong line creating a potentially questionable situation. Why is it permanent? This is wonderfully done & daring! :)

Rachel Blake
Date: 8/4/2013 10:32:00 AM

Thank you! :) and the permanent ring would be where he keeps his Copenhagen can in his back pocket.