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The Final Dawn

Looking out my bedroom window off into the setting sun wishing the tears stop flowing and to you I could run. I stare aimlessly at the falling star-shine where once held our hopes and dreams now I am almost blinded from her ever piercing beams. I always feared growing old and dying alone It seems I'm going to get my wish I have already died a thousand deaths So I shouldn't be afraid of just one more. It's well past the stroke of midnight but my eyes refuse to close there's nothing left to hold on to for all my dreams have slipped away. The end is rapidly approaching the chance for redemption has come and gone I'll be searching for no tomorrows As I wait upon my final dawn

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Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/28/2016 9:17:00 PM

My sentiments exactly, the true sign of a great poet, to let others know they are not alone in how they feel, as usual great write! something I am sure resonates with many!

Tom Quigley

Date: 8/27/2016 4:48:00 PM

As noted, you write longing and loneliness so amazingly well. Is it fiction, or do you just need to woo with your verse?

Lynn Marie

Date: 8/27/2016 4:12:00 PM

A deeply sad piece Tim with very bleak emotions that are beautifully written. Before "the final dawn" is a 'daily dawn"... I believe that with that 'light' begins a fresh 'clean slate' of possibility. One never knows about tomorrow but today...there is light :-) bundles of luminous blessings to you :-) lynn

Daniel Turner

Date: 8/27/2016 2:16:00 PM

So you're feeling a little lonely and helpless? It's that final sunset that worries me! Since we can't find love, we can only hope love finds us, Tim. Well written but very sad.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/27/2016 11:59:00 AM

- A beautiful and touching poem, Tim - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/27/2016 10:44:00 AM

sad hugs, x

Elisabeth Sheaffer

Date: 8/27/2016 9:15:00 AM

Nicely written but very sad. Redemption is available right up to the very last second. Dreams come and go but something good must surely be be waiting over the horizon. I certainly hope so!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/27/2016 9:11:00 AM

Oh Tim I got a huge lump in my throat reading this - the intense feeling of loneliness is quite overwhelming:-( hugs jan xx

Dm Babbit

Date: 8/27/2016 8:52:00 AM

As I get older, the final dawn is ever on my mind. Pray we all be ready.