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Poetic Form: Rhyme/Footle/Shape or Concrete

Inspired: 2024 January 04

Image: N/A

Spree three quite legal vehicles at a four-way intersection by selection, suddenly, abundantly, glaring, blaring, crashing, smashing, cooperating, accommodating, persistence, assistance, fender, bender, easy, peasy, surely, truly, ... "You had not responded, so sad God bless, *sonder." *sonder: special (mindless to being ...) ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ | P | | O | | L | | I | | C | | E | ____________________ ____________________ A M B U L A N C E F I R E T R U C K _____________________ ____________________ | | | |

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/14/2024 2:11:00 PM

I hope I can try to do this. So is the intro and conclusion necessary to the poem?? this is a fun read.

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/14/2024 2:33:00 PM

Meaning: whole wording-phrase<--ONLY the concluding/bottom line. The top line breaks apart between word & phrase, and the columned words are Footle as PS defined being 2-syllablic pairing words & the others are Non-Footle because they have more than 2-syllables, hence, my interpretation stands--more rhyming less footle.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/7/2024 4:26:00 AM

The shape part of the poem is hilarious. LOL..I wonder what is going to happen, also, add Emergency Management Vehicle in the other lane. They are all supposed to be able to have the right of way. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/7/2024 5:25:00 AM

Thank you, Sara. The original outlay was a USPS postal truck and federal vehicles have the right of way. I suppose that would not pan out to be true if circumstances were an actual emergency given to prudence, my friend. Aloha, William

Ink Empress

Date: 1/5/2024 11:45:00 PM

Dear William, I did also try footle and shape form if you look through my poems you might find.. but yours flow better and is more creative

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/6/2024 12:35:00 PM

Oh, I meant as a collage of poetic forms as mine is interpreted as both an inner rhyme and a footle which both closely define a homophonic type of rhyme, an added Update depicts my meaning. Thanks again, my friend, Aloha, William

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/5/2024 2:20:00 PM

spectacular and creative, dear William. I don't think I've ever seen this combo before, but you pulled it off. Applause! Have a splendid weekend, Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/5/2024 3:48:00 PM

Hi, Sara. 'Tis simple when said not so for one trekker's, but once accomplished ... imagine what waits yon the bend, my friend. Aloha, William

Ink Empress

Date: 1/5/2024 11:06:00 AM

How creative is this, shape rhyme and footle all in one so well crafted and delivered. I think youve done an excellent job here. I love especially “ easy peasy “ and also “ glaring blaring “ and i see from the shape an ambulance. You definitely did nail it! I think this will do well . Best wishes, sending you light

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/5/2024 12:29:00 PM

Hi, Ink Impress. Thank you for your clearly defining statements, hopefully, it's with the understanding its application is to the premiere contest I've initiated. I'm unsure if this is the sort of entry that'll be of interest to you or, Hiya and Silent One, but if it is, I'll be looking--Oops, used to, not anymore--forward to them, my friend. Aloha, William