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We lie together, you there, me here. I reach for you and you, melting into your pillow, pull away turning slowly, your message is clear, there is nothing, just emotional disarray. Under the darkening sky I whisper to you, the words but an echo in the fading light. I listen to the clock tick, our lives askew. The dysphonic sound echos our plight. The more I love you, the less you care. My passion swelters, my anger flares, but with melting indifference, you just lie there as the hole in my heart continually tears. Your love a landscape of stark indifference as time melts slow into the night. Me, I'm lost, somewhere out in the distance, and you, just out of frame, hide in plain sight, ...as time melts slow into the fading light.
05/07/16 Based on Salvador Dali's "The Persistence of Memory"

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Date: 11/10/2017 5:44:00 AM
So sad - well captured
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James Inman
Date: 11/10/2017 5:48:00 AM
Thank you Line.
Date: 6/14/2016 9:46:00 AM
PS: I also never heard of that poetry form, but then I struggle with a sonnet...But I got a prompt and will dip into Dali. Thank you.
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Date: 6/14/2016 8:15:00 PM
Thanks for both comments Kai. I'm happy you found something relatable in the poem.
Date: 6/14/2016 9:44:00 AM
I really like that and can relate.Your poem speaks to me...
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Date: 5/19/2016 12:40:00 PM
You found inspiration in such a thought provoking painting. The sadness is the sense of a stalemate in the relationship ... both going nowhere quickly, as time keeps melting ... well perceived piece of writing, James. It intrigued me.
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Date: 5/19/2016 4:50:00 PM
Thanks Timothy, a nice interpretation. We have a Salvador Dali Museum near where I live. It's been a while since I've been there but it is pretty impressive. They do not have "The Persistence of Memory" but they do have "The Disintegration of Persistence of Memory" a similar painting.
Date: 5/16/2016 11:59:00 AM
This is a profound piece. You say so much in those lines...the heartache is palpable. Congrats.
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James Inman
Date: 5/18/2016 9:48:00 AM
Thank you for the great comment Eileen.
Date: 5/13/2016 8:38:00 PM
Congrats on this one. Not sure your placement but I hope it was a GOOD one.
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James Inman
Date: 5/13/2016 11:45:00 PM
Thanks Andrea.
Date: 5/13/2016 3:35:00 PM
James, First , Thank You for your visit and comment on my poem! I saw this and was intrigued with this form and when I saw Salvador Dali's painting now coupled with this write it all comes together perfectly! I will enjoy reading your extensive library of writings! Thank You Sir!
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James Inman
Date: 5/13/2016 8:36:00 PM
Thank you for the kind comment Walter.
Date: 5/13/2016 2:27:00 AM
James, congratulations on your wonderful win. LINDA
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James Inman
Date: 5/13/2016 8:34:00 PM
Thank you PD
Date: 5/10/2016 8:39:00 AM
Hi James, an excellent write. I haven't even seen this form yet. The poem itself is beautiful and creative. The journey of your pen flows down the page and your words sing. This is worthy of the seven and the fave i give it....Mike.
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James Inman
Date: 5/10/2016 9:23:00 AM
Thanks Mike, you're too kind.
Date: 5/9/2016 3:19:00 PM
wow, you took that theme to a whole other level using a person as the theme for that picture. This is a GREAT interpretation for that strange picture. I really like it. Wonderful job.
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James Inman
Date: 5/9/2016 6:22:00 PM
Thank you Andrea.
Date: 5/8/2016 11:46:00 PM
This poem is amazing! :)
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James Inman
Date: 5/9/2016 4:41:00 AM
A wonderful comment Arthur, thank you.

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