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The Dusk It Rained On Me

And it finally rained The dusk after you touched me. All of me was broken... Broken into the sea. All the hopeless pieces of me Were shed unto thee. Your presence stronger, I can feel you in the breeze. All my crippled crumbles Have shed just like the leaves. And in you I can see me, Just as I am meant to be. Without imperfections, Except the one I call me. As my pieces lay In the streaming sea, It’s obvious that I, As perfect as I try to be Am a part of us. Just as you are a part of me. And if I shed again next season You will always be the cure But never the reason.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 2/26/2016 5:57:00 PM
Charlotte Makala, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing, hope to see a new one from you again. LOVE LINDA
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Date: 1/4/2016 2:48:00 PM
C M,,, enjoyed reading your poem. Hugs **SKAT**
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Date: 1/16/2010 9:11:00 PM
Welcome Charlotte This reads very smoothly, I enjoyed the experience. thank you ...Margaret
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Date: 1/14/2010 2:08:00 AM
good poem, soothing. MAKALA! is it setswana? (the language spoken in Botswana)
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Date: 1/12/2010 3:28:00 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Charlotte. I also wish you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol
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