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I The depth of steep, hellish ascent darkness abides, the peak obscene. cliffhanger of sweat, the creature bent attempting to climb, make a dent. No wind brushes away the hair in her eyes. She recalls nothing of birdsong or sunrise. A hunchback of time, minutes pass slowly. Diamonds glitter, the sun beats boldly. Like a desert walk the road is parched. With a sting of bumblebees she marched. II Delightful descent of diamondiferous slide. Easy-peasy pleasant, air-conditioned ride. Beautiful petals of friends, flutter of wings, a moon full of stars, the universe sings. Bare feet, toes polished bright pinks and reds. Canopied four-posters, wide open beds. Trees with jade and ruby candies, sweet to the tongue, as she tells of her wild treat life, retreat with angel feathers, falling for her many handsome men, wailing on her silken sheets as she says so long to the coddlesome place she knows she belongs. III Suddenly the slide falls out, the flames shoot up. She drinks the potent blood from her chalice cup. As her fear and anger explode, the fire grows hotter. The ground like a hurricane ship, teeter-totters. Sinks. IV Her twin stands tall, as a snowy white sail; blue skies, the eyes of God, she hails. All torment wiped from her brow, she’s strong She climbed upwards by the narrow way. V Don’t take the easy ride. It’s a bottomless pit. Fly to heights of eagles wings - the depth of eternal lift. 3/13/2021

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Date: 3/15/2021 11:57:00 AM
Such an impressive write. Enjoyed reading this one.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/15/2021 3:11:00 PM
Thank you so much, Robert!
Date: 3/14/2021 6:13:00 PM
AMAZING! ~ gw
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/15/2021 4:16:00 AM
Thank you, Gershon!
Date: 3/14/2021 6:19:00 AM
I love the positive message. I so enjoyed reading this Kim! Awesome job!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/14/2021 12:48:00 PM
Thank you, Mark!
Date: 3/14/2021 5:24:00 AM
Kim, your imagery is exquisitely penned. Beautiful poem and gorgeously done.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/14/2021 5:32:00 AM
Thank you so much, my friend!
Date: 3/13/2021 5:04:00 PM
Powerful imagery in this piece, sometimes those depths feel as if we're never coming up and then, nature has a way of lightening many loads. Beautiful.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/13/2021 6:43:00 PM
Thanks for your insightful comment :) Springtime is nearly here!
Date: 3/13/2021 7:10:00 AM
I enjoyed this contemplative write. This is one that is more impactful with concurrent reads. ;0)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/13/2021 9:33:00 AM
Thanks so much, Richard! I was walking the hills in my neighborhood when I came up with this one. Happy Springtime!
Date: 3/13/2021 6:56:00 AM
No moments to steal, when each point of the Ferris wheel has equal appeal ~ enjoyed this reflective muse
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/13/2021 9:35:00 AM
With suffering comes strength we never knew we had, found in the one who created us. There is pain in the downslide too but it is not sanctioned.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/13/2021 9:31:00 AM
With suffering comes strength we never knew we had, found in the one who created us. There is pain in the downslide too but it is not sanctioned. Thank you! Happy Spring! It’s almost here!
Date: 3/13/2021 6:34:00 AM
A deep poem that needs pondering. The narrow road is always the best.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/13/2021 9:29:00 AM
The narrow way may seem constraining but the other way is the pits! God bless you, dear one!
Date: 3/13/2021 6:34:00 AM
A beautiful poem with great thoughts Kim.. specially the last two lines.. Hugs.. ~ Ani
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Date: 3/13/2021 9:29:00 AM
Thank you, Anitha! Hugs!
Date: 3/13/2021 5:53:00 AM
Yes, the easy ride and wide way can lead to destruction and eternal doom. Enjoyed reading your creative work. Sara
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/13/2021 9:28:00 AM
When the road’s not bumpy, you could be on a dangerous path! Happy Springtime...days away now!
Date: 3/13/2021 5:53:00 AM
Definitely better to follow the narrow path that leads to heaven... enjoyed your write. God bless you with love, Gina
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/13/2021 9:27:00 AM
So true! God bless you! Springtime’s in the air!

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