The Danger of Spring Thunder Clouds Or Nice Guys Finish Last

the danger of spring thunder clouds sunray glimmered love wantonly enticed darker wilder winds chose thunder-- not me May 29, 2013 Valdez, Alaska Victoria Anderson-Throop

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Poet Tacito

Date: 6/6/2013 7:27:00 AM

Damn, some very strong lines here. Ah, the power of thunder. As with Elai, I believe this is 1 too many for a Haiku. But, either way, this rocked!

Poet Tacito
Date: 6/6/2013 11:58:00 AM

No problem! I'm not overly sensitive about stuff like that. It's silly to do that. The message was clear & poignant here. In the end, that's what matters. :)

Victoria Anderson-Throop
Date: 6/6/2013 10:05:00 AM

thanks Drake...think that in the modern world Haiku can be variable in syllables. originally, I learned it MUST be 1, 3, 1....obviously, that rule is no longer the order of the day....sorry if it was a bother...should never post in the middle of the night either....thanks for reading...Victoria

Elai Cee

Date: 6/6/2013 6:04:00 AM

good day Victoria i love the imagery here and how it indirectly told the flaming fire of love using the sounds and appearance of nature. But i am confused about the pattern of ur haiku 6/8/6 compare to the original form of Haiku 5/7/5 but anyway this is pretty cool!...keep smiling---ELAI