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The Dancing Girl

A blythe young girl with lively feet, Said she would rather dance than eat; So she shook off all the worldly blues, And put on her dancing shoes. She danced thru day and danced thru night, She danced till the stars lost their light; She danced her lover out of breath, And danced her husband quite to death. She danced her beauty all away, And then she danced the night away;. Her big toe then went out of joint, And all the others came to a point. Still she danced, and waltzed and whirled, The dizziest girl in all the world. She danced herself as a spinning top, Out of breath but could not stop; Still spinning around, she flew so far, Then her feet got caught on the point of a star: And there she danced for all to see, In all the dark spaces of eternity.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 4/3/2015 4:57:00 PM
This is going to fav's I have one called The Dancer .
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Date: 1/2/2013 4:35:00 PM
I went diggin'... and I'm so glad I did! Magnificent couplet rhyming and dazzling imagery. A glorious piece!! Love, Keith
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Date: 10/15/2011 7:55:00 AM
Here..my dear ;)..your rhyme form is COUPLET ..there was a fairy tale or 2 like this Red Shoes was one I think and The 12 Dancing Princesses another..dancing does make one SO happy it's always a giggle to read!!! Thanks for stopping by and always saying such nice stuff I wish you'd try a ballad for my Creepy Critter Contest..I'd be glad to help you through it? Light & Love
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Date: 10/7/2011 7:40:00 PM
she danced her lover , and killed her hubby, - this here poem is really quite lovely. ha-ha this is good !
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Date: 9/20/2011 7:42:00 AM
loving the concept of this poem..nicely written...love the creativity behind it
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Date: 9/12/2011 10:34:00 AM
I would like to take this time to thank you for your kind words on my poetry. I would also like to let you know I always enjoy reading your wonderful poetry Elizabeth. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/9/2011 1:54:00 PM
You definetly get an 'A' for imagination! I think that this dancing girl has either been hanging around Sir Lancelot, or she danced through a field of red poppies:) Very cute.
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Date: 9/8/2011 7:39:00 PM
I'm breathless...you set me to dancing as I read on. Brilliant! CR
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Date: 9/6/2011 9:44:00 AM
A delightful fantasy piece. An enjoyable read. xoxo Robert.
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Date: 9/6/2011 5:23:00 AM
A very witty fantasy you've illustrated. I wander if you dance as lovely as she? Beautiful write Elizabeth!
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Date: 9/5/2011 4:38:00 PM
Wow, Awesome write lovely Lady Elizabeth think I would wish on that star...with love...old Jack
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Date: 9/5/2011 4:28:00 PM
What a lovely fun piece, Elizabeth
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Date: 9/5/2011 9:14:00 AM
you have made... a pagan god and placed her constilation in the heavens with orion and hurculies.
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Date: 9/5/2011 8:57:00 AM
ahhh so that's how to become a star! Delightful little story poem, Elizabeth. Fun to read. Thank you for your comments. Much appreciated.
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Date: 9/5/2011 5:18:00 AM
Smiles of delight at this fast paced whirl. I to love to dance. thanks for reading some of mine Elizabeth. regards Marg
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Date: 9/5/2011 2:18:00 AM
thnx, lizzie, for your sweet comments..dancing too could turn quite obsessive like poetry..nice write, jag
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Date: 9/5/2011 12:55:00 AM
Smile, *^_^* “She Sounds As Though An Angel With Her Precious Happy Heart *^_^* And Your Beauty Is An Angel Too For Painting Such A Lovely Canvas In Flowing Rhyme & Within Such Pleasing Colours & Hues *^_^* Spinning Through The Universe Unto A Never Ending Stories, Happiness, Amid A Priceless Ballerinas Shoes *^_^* Simply Beautiful, Dear Beautiful Elizabeth!” === My Love Unto Your Fabulous Treasures, Always & Forever, Jasper *
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Date: 9/4/2011 11:16:00 PM
You are a wonderful poet Elizabeth.The more I am reading your poetry the more I am getting hypnotized by it!Another gem here.You are now added to my fav poets:)
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Date: 9/4/2011 9:23:00 PM
great work!! I love it!! you shame me again....stop showing off!! just teasing! I love reading your works!!
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Date: 9/4/2011 9:14:00 PM
ahhh, and she can be seen even today on "DAncing with the Stars!!!" Lovely tale my dear. I love it!
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Date: 9/4/2011 3:26:00 PM
The sweet young girl with fancy pen. Has entertained the troops again. She flits and twirls and sways so well. With rhyme and rythem and plot to dwell. She has captured the hearts of all who read. She fills our souls with what we need. And now I ask that she be kind. And share with me her beautiful mind.
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Date: 9/4/2011 1:10:00 PM
Wonderful write!! I enjoyed reading this lovely poem!!!----Lori
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Date: 9/4/2011 12:15:00 PM
Very imaginative Elizabeth I do so enjoy reading your poetry. Carol x
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Date: 9/4/2011 11:56:00 AM
Wow, this is quite the luxurious poem! I loved this magnificent write! I don't dance, but I enjoy watching those that really know how too! You must be a dancer writing such a great poem about dancing!!
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Date: 9/4/2011 11:02:00 AM
Dance your troubles away... I love to dance. Nice poem I enjoyed it
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