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The Clench of Fall

cauldroned lakes of steam wafting up in fevered plumes labored breath as life exhales venomed arctic gales plunder trees on sun starved days brittle claws of tumbled leaves 17 Sep 2014 Choka Me - Poetry Contest 5 - 7 - 7 - 5 - 7 - 7

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Date: 9/27/2014 9:35:00 PM
So glad to see this one on the winners' list. BIG congrats to you.
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Date: 9/27/2014 2:14:00 PM
I really enjoyed fading this piece, David. I love the progression of fall. Congrats.
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Date: 9/27/2014 8:40:00 AM
What a stunning piece. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 9/27/2014 6:40:00 AM
This is very expressive, David. The 'clench' in the title transmits what follows throughout your impressive choka. Congrats on a merited win. // paul
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Date: 9/27/2014 5:37:00 AM
Thanks for the entry and support. Congrats on the win, david
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Date: 9/26/2014 1:55:00 AM
The cool night winds, the claw-like leaves, and those foggy days do seem to grasp us every autumn season.... I loved the detailed imagery in these few short lines. Wonderful writing, David! Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 9/18/2014 9:33:00 PM
a very descriptive choka, David. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 9/18/2014 12:50:00 PM
your work is full of energy, of disaster.. I really enjoyed it, david.. it really leaves you hanging. ... huggs
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