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The Broken Column

Broken Column wrapped in female form split down the centre more than femininity exposed Breasts capture the eye Her softness Confusing Arousing head held high Her long black hair flows cascades across decades immortalized Tears streaming down a saddened face Doves crying to be understood cheerful colors confuse the minds eye What thoughts lie beneath that unibrow Beauty within painted distortions Who is her oppressor Look deep Emotions overexposed Is this her living nightmare broken yet standing tall Immovable moving force demanding to be seen Silent yet speaking volumes Metal corset binds holds constricts White flowing gown What is hidden beneath What does she wish to shield from our prying eyes Yet if you look deep she reveals all See beyond the physical the manicured the lovely crimes nailed to her being cutting pushing splitting exposing A heart pierced hidden from sight Immovable contemplations reacting with the unseen Barren landscapes contradicting female form Symbol of all women givers sustainers of life Fertile powerful spiritual eternal Rising from the ground our foundation We build upon her soul Free her celebrate her rise Without her we fall we fail we cease to exist Do not allow her to crumble beneath the weight of our iniquity Cyndi Macmillan's "Women who paint contest series:Frieda Kahalo in Free Verse." The painting I chose was "The Broken Column"

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Date: 8/4/2015 2:51:00 AM
Richard....you'll be happy to know that I read your poem to my class today. We were talking about creativity in art. I showed them Frieda's painting and then read your poem. They loved the way you expressed your understanding of the artist's work! Thank you.... :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/4/2015 7:29:00 AM
That is so cool! I am honoured. Please pass on my website address to your class, I would love to have some young students reading my work.
Date: 11/13/2013 5:03:00 PM
powerful and delicately respectful, Richard.... lovely
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Date: 11/9/2013 6:56:00 AM
Congrats on your win in Cyndi's contest with this lovely piece of writing, Richard!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/9/2013 8:48:00 AM
Thanks so much.
Date: 11/7/2013 10:48:00 PM
Very lovely, evocative poem to Frieda Kahlo's poem Richard, congratulations on your win
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/8/2013 8:26:00 AM
Thanks Sheri.
Date: 11/7/2013 4:46:00 PM
an impressive take on the painting; I think this is one of the best poems of yours that I've read so far, thoroughly deserving of its high placement in the contest - congrats! :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/7/2013 5:29:00 PM
Thanks Charlotte.
Date: 11/7/2013 12:22:00 PM
I am very charmed by your win... , brilliant imagery... nice win * HUGS & LOVE <3 ~SKAT~Richard,
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/7/2013 5:29:00 PM
Thanks SKAT
Date: 11/7/2013 9:03:00 AM
splendid write ..congrats on your win
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/7/2013 5:28:00 PM
Thanks Joseph.
Date: 9/3/2013 4:46:00 AM
Well done, your words peeled away the layers to find the many facets of woman. Love the line..."Doves crying..." So perfect.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/3/2013 7:53:00 AM
In the picture there are doves in her eyes.
Date: 8/30/2013 4:35:00 PM
This speaks volumes Richard. When I was perusing this I cant help but feel the emotions exuding out of your words. Well crafted!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/3/2013 7:54:00 AM
Thanks Mustapha, I was trying to do the artist justice, her work is powerful.
Date: 8/29/2013 8:59:00 AM
Astounding writing here. You put the "man" in "woman". Strong & deep setting you established in this writing.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/29/2013 8:04:00 PM
Thanks Drake
Date: 8/29/2013 8:12:00 AM
Nice poem, it made me think whether "Her" the third person is a woman or a symbolic representation of something? Your poem made me think... which is a sign of good writing. Now you are producing a poem per day. Very good... I would like to do so too, but don't have that luxury time but when everything is fine...I will sit down and write full-time. You are a good motivator on this site to encourage writing.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/29/2013 8:23:00 AM
Thanks Christine. I am an early riser so I usually write first thing before I start my day. This gives me the time I need before the busyness of life gets in the way and obscures my thoughts.
Date: 8/29/2013 5:21:00 AM
Richard once more you excel in this write wishing Gl but you dont need it lol the quality speaks for itself Shadow x smile
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/29/2013 6:57:00 AM
Thanks Shadow!
Date: 8/29/2013 5:03:00 AM
Broken yet standing tall. This has also touched my heart. HOW did I miss this one ? You're the winner !
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/29/2013 6:58:00 AM
Thanks Red, I'm glad you connected with it.
Date: 8/28/2013 9:41:00 PM
Awesome...no luck needed....top of the chart!
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Red Fiery
Date: 8/29/2013 5:04:00 AM
I strongly agree with you Donna ! Cheers !
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/28/2013 11:44:00 PM
Thanks Donna. :0)
Date: 8/28/2013 7:08:00 PM
Nicely written and thank you for your comment and I will change destiny. cheri
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/28/2013 11:45:00 PM
Thanks Cherie, your poem is excellent.
Date: 8/28/2013 4:45:00 PM
One that is very unique and creative ...Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the visit to my work with congrats.Sara
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/28/2013 5:04:00 PM
Thanks Sara, the visit was my pleasure.
Date: 8/28/2013 1:34:00 PM
Hi, Richard....femininity...This is an interesting read, but I can't connect with it...Would you explain...please...Is this for the Freida Kahlo contest? The mono brow gave that away..,,Take care...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/29/2013 7:00:00 AM
Hi Eileen I changed the first part, I agree in retreading that part it didn't fit. Thanks.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/29/2013 4:05:00 AM
:) Lovely changes, Richard...I don't mean to be crass, but after the breasts capture the eye..arousing intellect doesn't seem to fit...for me...the breasts are a sign of her vulnerability or defiance or torture...That section, I like the way you had it before....Also, the shorter version left more to the reader's imagination...Just the feel of the first one....Here...you've explained it all, an well, I don't know...just an opinion! It's beautiful either way....
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/28/2013 1:50:00 PM
I GOT IT! :) Google to the rescue!!! Now...I'm connected and zoned....GREAT WRITE! :) Good luck on contest.

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