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The Black Rose

I can't go on The noise in my head Futures bleak Tomorrow i dread Please come and see me And I'll open my heart Talk me through And we will make a new start. As quick as i could The journey was made As i opened the door On the table was laid An envelope, Bearing my name On the out side It read. I knew you would come Thank you my dear Your a wonderful man Year after year Inside, there's a letter Written by me I have decided, What my futures to be Don't be shocked It's where i want to be But don't worry I'll be close to thee. I open the letter And unfold it out It's totally blank My life's without I sit down stunned My world apart Making plans with my girl For our new start Hours pass like minutes As sirens wail A train has stopped On the Northern Line rail From her window i see Her car all crushed People turning away In sickened rush As i look at the letter Blank as new Our future decided From that window view. http://www.thehighlanderspoems.com/loss2.php

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 8/3/2009 4:28:00 PM
Despite my love for words...I can't find the right words to tell you how much this piece touched me. Though very sad...you depicted life just as it really is...defensless, unpredictable, and untimely! It only takes a minute for life to change forever...I really seriously like this poem! Thank you for you incredible talent! You are a very special man with a gift that I have never ever seen before. I can't even be jealous cause I am so touched by what you write! Thank you! Deb
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Date: 8/3/2009 8:17:00 AM
The descriptions in your poem were incredible! so vidid the images they protreyed. Amazing poem. Alice
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Date: 8/2/2009 9:51:00 AM
wow love this
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Date: 7/31/2009 1:27:00 PM
wow, this is amazing. o.o
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Date: 7/25/2009 3:52:00 AM
ohh. this is lovely, but tragic. i love it tho, just the way it's written.. xx
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Date: 7/20/2009 2:49:00 PM
Great write, sad but great none the less.....Aleera
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Date: 7/19/2009 8:32:00 AM
Emotional and crushed. Absolutetly love it.
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Date: 7/19/2009 6:54:00 AM
Sad and heartfelt-different yet great oncemore--charma
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Date: 7/19/2009 4:48:00 AM
I feel the emotion ...pain, loss, disappointment, sadness. Love the work. Sara
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Date: 7/19/2009 3:11:00 AM
ewh, That hurts! Excellent writing, James. One of my daughter's high school friends died that way. Crushed by a train. It was very sad. Take care, my friend. Lovingly, Dane
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Date: 7/18/2009 7:40:00 PM
Heartbreaking, and as always excellent flow and rhythm from beginning to end! Thank you for your kind comments on my work, always appreciated.
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Date: 7/18/2009 7:12:00 PM
Again you have produced a platinum hit... Great poem my friend and thank you for all your warm jestures.....:JP)
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Date: 7/18/2009 6:51:00 PM
James, you tell such incredibly heartfelt stories. Although this one is sad, I could see every action and sense every emotion. Beautiful writing! Love, Carolyn
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