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The Alley

He walks down dark alleys at night. Searching for evidence of life. He can't believe the man was right. His daughter victim of a knife. Sometimes the mind begins to break. He can't grasp this reality. The pain felt with each breath he takes. Each step steeped in his misery. He see's a girl that looks like her. Thinks back to when she was a child. Overcome by tears his eyes blur. She had been one so sweet and mild. Why had his girl become so wild? Inspired by reading Seren's English Quintain. My first attempt at this form.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 5/22/2013 11:45:00 PM
A dreadful story... but one that I'm sure many parents can relate, too. Knowing that it's too late to do anything different... the finality of it hits hard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/23/2013 6:28:00 AM
I have no idea where this one came from, it more or less wrote itself.
Date: 5/22/2013 8:58:00 AM
:( I feel the pain...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/22/2013 9:23:00 AM
Sorry for the pain.
Date: 5/20/2013 10:50:00 AM
Brilliantly done... Some thing ask by many parents... wishingthey could see their children one more time.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/20/2013 11:43:00 AM
Thanks Carol
Date: 5/20/2013 9:23:00 AM
You are so talented with writing.take care
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/22/2013 9:24:00 AM
Thanks for being first again.
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Colleen Bono
Date: 5/20/2013 9:24:00 AM
first again

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