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submerged desires tempt to take bites at forbidden fruit ------------------------------ 5th August 2015 ~ Visual 2 5-3-5 syllable count Contest: Pretty Little Lunes Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich

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Susan Ashley

Date: 2/9/2018 8:50:00 PM

Such a brilliant and creative take on the picture Paul but also an intriguing and compelling poem on its own. A clever, sensual and thought provoking write with beautiful imagery and meaningful undertones. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/11/2018 3:00:00 PM

Thank you Paul. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 2/11/2018 2:03:00 PM

I'm so glad things are looking much brighter, Susan:) Will keep my fingers crossed for her. Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/10/2018 7:31:00 PM

Oh you are so kind Paul :)) J is doing better and better with each passing week. She's back to her full school schedule and part-time work schedule. She will also be following a neurosurgeon in a Providence R.I. hospital and a psychologist in a local trauma center - so she's excited and I'm keeping my fingers crossed that there are no setbacks. You're just the best poetry friend! :))

Paul Callus
Date: 2/10/2018 3:57:00 PM

Pleased to find you delving in some of my early posts, Susan:) Thank you for the pleasant visit and the well expressed feedback. Hope J is doing well. ~ Warm regards // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/5/2016 12:06:00 AM

The poem and picture fit so well together ... especially the "submerged desires" with the cherry crashing into the waters. Never heard of a lune however ... is it like a haiku?

Paul Callus
Date: 3/6/2016 10:11:00 AM

Hi Timothy....been down with a lingering cold/temperature...making an effort to answer some mail. Glad you like these 'submerged desires'. The lune form is simply made up of a 5-3-5 syllable count, no other requirements. ~ regards // paul

Kim Merryman

Date: 8/17/2015 12:35:00 PM

Ah yes. Sweet forbidden fruit! Great take on the picture, Paul! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Paul Callus
Date: 8/17/2015 4:47:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely feedback, Kim! I enjoyed your winning entry, too:) Hugs ~ paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/16/2015 11:15:00 PM

What a wonderful imagery Paul! Congrats on big win! Absolutely true to the title, God that word forbidden in itself tempts!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/17/2015 10:54:00 AM

Absolutely lovely feedback, Upma! Glad that you have been tempted:) Thank you!:) Regards ~ paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/16/2015 8:58:00 PM

Paul, Congratulations on your wonderful win. Always ~LINDA~

Paul Callus
Date: 8/17/2015 10:52:00 AM

Thank you Linda...always yours:) paul

Skat A

Date: 8/16/2015 1:32:00 AM

Beauty Paul, WOW... Beauty at its finest, congratulations in Andrea's "Pretty Little Lunes contest" SKAT Love

Paul Callus
Date: 8/16/2015 9:34:00 AM

A significant 'wow', Skat! Thank you for reading and enjoying. ~ Hugs // paul

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 8/15/2015 11:55:00 AM

Excellent Pretty Little Lune! The visions of pleasure to come are so enticing that it is so easy to succumb to temptation! Congratulations on your great win, my friend! This is an enjoyable read! Love it! Pandita

Paul Callus
Date: 8/16/2015 9:32:00 AM

Many thanks Pandita! Temptation and anticipation go hand in hand. I succumb to your lovely feedback:) ~ All the best. // paul

Abdul Malik

Date: 8/15/2015 9:36:00 AM

Who wouldn't take a bite--and willing to fall from grace!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/16/2015 9:25:00 AM

It's human nature...goes back a long way! Thanks for stopping by, Abdul. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 8/15/2015 7:26:00 AM

Dropping back with my congratulations Paul I really liked this one:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 8/15/2015 8:55:00 AM

Thank you for the double visit and congrats, Jan:) You did very well yourself with your winning entry:) Hugs // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/15/2015 7:21:00 AM

Your forbidden fruit is delicious, a great take on the prompt and a nice win Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/15/2015 8:52:00 AM

Thank you Casarah! Your comments are lovely...so is the latest avatar:) // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/15/2015 1:21:00 AM

very nicely done, Paul. BIG congrats in my contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/15/2015 6:23:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea. Glad to be on your list, considering it was a race against time! Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 8/6/2015 11:18:00 AM

Wow nice! All the best in the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/6/2015 5:50:00 PM

Thank you, Njeri! Your wow says it all:) // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/6/2015 10:46:00 AM

Nice and sweet, Paul. Is the category to be verse then? I loved this one.....Hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 8/6/2015 5:50:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Eileen. I don't think any mention was made of form; it was my choice to put it under verse. (I did not find Lune included in soup list.) ~ Hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 8/6/2015 7:14:00 AM

I like this pic but i really don't know how to interpret it.. :D! nice one Paul----n.. :D!~Olive Eloisa hugs!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/6/2015 5:45:00 PM

Mine was a race against time, Olive_eloi; did not have time to make a comfortable choice of visual, and went straight away for this one. Regards and hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 8/5/2015 3:25:00 PM

Oh Paul I do like your take on the theme -this is extremely clever! good luck in the contest - have posted 2 blogs today am on cloud 9:-) hugs jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/6/2015 5:49:00 PM

lol I didn't think I dare post it for the contest but I am really pleased with the one I did submit I do hope Andrea likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 8/6/2015 5:36:00 PM

I will make time to read your blogs, Jan. Still having a hard time answering mail; I am finding Soup to be very slow. ~ Pleased that you like this entry....enjoyed your cherry offering:) Hugs // paul