Tanka1

languid afternoon cottonball clouds drift across an expansive sky creating elaborate patterns for painters to interpret

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Carol Fillmore

Date: 11/26/2019 5:44:00 AM

thank you Rituko!!

Rituko Shindo
Date: 11/27/2019 6:40:00 AM

(^^)/

Rituko Shindo

Date: 11/26/2019 4:47:00 AM

It was a gloomy afternoon, but while you were watching the clouds in the sky, you became an artistic sensation. I like your sensibility.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/10/2010 11:48:00 PM

Nicely done!

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 8/8/2010 10:02:00 PM

Carol,this is just stunning. I hope you keep writing and enter some of the contests..you will do well..BG

Simone Segal

Date: 6/17/2010 3:26:00 PM

Very creative write! love Simone

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/15/2010 4:49:00 AM

I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Carol. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/14/2010 4:44:00 PM

Great desciptive write with excellent metaphoric language...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara

Gavin Pattison

Date: 6/14/2010 2:50:00 PM

Beautiful choice of words, great imagery, loved the last line- it tends to be all we can do - interpret nature with the model in which our brain creates, but one cannot not negate the aethetic beauty that whirls around us, that you encapsulated brilliantly just with these few words, thanks for this. Regards, Gavin.