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Tangy Lips Extend

underage, hiding Tom Collins with lemon twist – suddenly mature tangy lips extend bitter taste turns to sweet bliss – future husband found *By Carolyn Devonshire for Michael’s “A Kiss Like a Fruit” contest. October 10, 2011 On our first date, John took me to a bar where he knew the bartender well. John did not know I was underage – he’d never asked. LOL

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 11/18/2012 11:35:00 AM
Hmmmm....good one!!
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Date: 11/7/2011 6:10:00 AM
A belated congratulations I am sending you for your win in Michael's "A Kiss Like Fruit" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/5/2011 3:10:00 PM
congrats on your win in the contest carolyn, I really like how you drew on personal experience to write your senryu :-)
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Date: 11/5/2011 6:31:00 AM
Congrats Carolyn on your win.I liked it very much first time around.
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Date: 11/4/2011 8:10:00 PM
I was hung up on trying to figure out who tom collins was and then it occurred to me it might be the name of some drink. hahaha. Anyway a delightful story in this one .Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 11/4/2011 3:17:00 PM
I love this one. Carolyn....the cops are still looking for you....lol. Young love is just like this...your personal experiences add such flavor to your writing. I am still stuck on your wedding rehearsal poem....now u gave me something else to envision. ha ha. Gwendolen
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Date: 11/4/2011 2:41:00 PM
Great entry and a sweet story of the begining of love with a lemon... loved it.. Congrats on your 3rd place win in my contest... love Michael
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Date: 10/15/2011 7:56:00 AM
Carolyn---a lovely warm kissing poem for Michael's contest. The note bene is wonderful too. Hope this finds you well. Oh, to be where u are now!
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Date: 10/11/2011 12:18:00 PM
love this kiss that changed one's life..
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Date: 10/11/2011 11:53:00 AM
lovely warm nostalgic piece, my friend
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Date: 10/11/2011 5:04:00 AM
Very nice Senryu here Carolyn.Best wishes.
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Date: 10/10/2011 10:13:00 PM
maybe he knew. jhl
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John Loving Iii
Date: 10/10/2011 10:14:00 PM
a man with a beard.
Date: 10/10/2011 9:52:00 PM
Sweet with a touch of bitter. Just like most couples. Well writ.
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Date: 10/10/2011 9:26:00 PM
A lovely Senrya that captures the moment most charmingly. Very well accomplished and very moving. Thank you for sharing and May God Bless!
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Date: 10/10/2011 8:35:00 PM
What a wonderful piece here, Carolyn! I love the "bitter taste turns to sweet bliss" line that you have written. You can feel the passion within the poem!! Great job!!
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Russell Sivey
Date: 10/10/2011 8:44:00 PM
You will do well in the contest!

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