Taken

My heart has many Holes that can't be repaired People try to patch the womb But they never stay their My trust is broken In a million peises And nobody is there Nobody but Jesus My love has been taken Right out of my hands Now i cant do what I have planned My soulhas left Me dieing in the grass But mabyi can Be happy at last.

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/24/2010 10:26:00 AM

Please continue to share your poetry with us here at PoetrySoup. Wishing you and yours a wonderful Thanksgiving Ja'Chel. Love, Carol

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/22/2010 10:30:00 AM

I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Ja"Chel. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. You can look to the left side of the main page and find lots of information on PoetrySoup including contests by members of PoetrySoup and contests by the PoetrySoup site also which you as a new member and us oldies also may enter. If you have questions please feel free to ask ANYONE here. We are ALL willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol

Sierra Arnold

Date: 11/19/2010 10:45:00 AM

This is beautiful and sad and wonderful!

Poet Tacito

Date: 11/19/2010 10:28:00 AM

You have a few typos: "Their" (There), "Peises" (Pieces), "Dieing" (Dying), & "Mabyi" (Maybe). That being said, I hear this sad message in this poem. Happiness comes from within, thus everything else will shine no matter how dark it gets. Excellent piece!