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Symbiosis

We are blighted wards Sordid, trepidatious scars Haven's wall too darkly far Eden's thornbush guards Caught behind our safety bars Still, we count the free range stars 4/02/20 For 'Pick a Title - Vol 15 - Sedoka' contest Sponsor: Edward Ibeh theme: symbiosis

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Edward Ibeh

Date: 4/18/2020 5:16:00 PM

Fantastic sedoka, Michelle:-) Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/13/2020 12:59:00 PM

- Congratulations on a great winning poem in Edward Ibeh Sedoka contest, Michelle :) - // Anne-Lise :)

Jenish Somadas

Date: 4/13/2020 12:35:00 AM

Great win Michelle.. Congrats..

Jc Hawkens

Date: 4/12/2020 9:52:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. Your poem is most Beautifully penned. I hope all is well. JC Hawkens

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/12/2020 11:01:00 AM

Hope you are well also, thanks for commenting, J.C!

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 4/12/2020 2:13:00 AM

Congratulations on your win! Such a nice poem. Had to read a few times to understand it, but once I did the beauty was visual. Well done!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/12/2020 11:00:00 AM

So appreciate your kind comment, thank you!

Winged Warrior

Date: 4/11/2020 10:11:00 PM

Congrats!! MF...great minds think alike...now I'm going to watch the "Three Stooges" lol...stay safe my friend...best wishes from the Wingster :o)

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/11/2020 10:21:00 PM

At least we can connect online! Thank you for your kind comment, WW-

John Watt

Date: 4/11/2020 9:21:00 PM

Beautifully stated, Michelle. Nicely rhymed, powerful words. I like Eden's thornbush best; so much packed into two words. Congrats, my friend ~ John

John Watt
Date: 4/12/2020 8:09:00 PM

Michelle, your reply made me grateful for these kinds of interactions with thoughtful, experienced poets. Thinking about a word and revising it can sometimes mean the different between a good poem and a great poem. That thoughtfulness is evident in your writings and an inspiration to me. Thank you.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/11/2020 10:17:00 PM

Actually, I was originally going to use 'garden' but after tinkering with it, I thought 'Eden' worked better, thank you so much for commenting - have a happy, and safe, Easter-

Mark Koplin

Date: 4/5/2020 3:07:00 PM

So much beauty up above. Great work!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/5/2020 6:40:00 PM

Thank you, Mark

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 4/5/2020 2:30:00 PM

Wow Michelle - breathtaking! Blessings. Jennifer.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/5/2020 6:40:00 PM

Much appreciate it, thank you, Jennifer

Rico Leffanta

Date: 4/3/2020 1:58:00 PM

Well done! As a child, our ritual was not saying prayers, but counting stars until we fell asleep. Still works! Aloha! Rico

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/4/2020 3:06:00 PM

Some count sheep, some count stars - hope you are sleeping well-

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 4/2/2020 10:16:00 PM

Wonderful Sedoka, Michelle ... for so long I was afraid of the dark, until I realized that the darkness held such beauty as the stars - I love the dichotomy here and the exquisite phrasing - superb write! :o) <3

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/4/2020 3:05:00 PM

Very flattered by your compliment, thank you for the feedback!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/2/2020 9:31:00 PM

So sweetly poetic, Michelle. Great contest entry! Best always, Gershon

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/2/2020 9:45:00 PM

I am flattered you like it, thanks, gw!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/2/2020 8:49:00 PM

This is really well done Michelle. I hope is does great in the contest. xxoo

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/2/2020 9:15:00 PM

Thank you kindly, Connie -

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/2/2020 5:21:00 PM

How profound, Michelle!! Great sedoka.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/2/2020 5:35:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 4/2/2020 4:09:00 PM

Hi Michelle, love the contrast between the darkness and hope that looking at the stars brings us. Also love the phrase "free range stars!" Really nice write! Good luck in the contest.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/2/2020 5:35:00 PM

Thank you so much for your kind comment, Sam!