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swirling russet leaves ~ scattering of random thoughts in a restless night - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - A Haiku with Movement Nature Themed Contest Hosted by Tania Kitchin © 7th May, 2020

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 11/15/2020 10:08:00 AM

You've painted a perfect picture, Paul. I have those restless thoughts occasionally :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2020 2:34:00 PM

In my case such nights don't occur too often; I don't get any sleep when they do...though they have their good points...that's how this poem was born! Regards // paul

Panagiota Romios

Date: 5/23/2020 3:50:00 AM

You are an wizard with words Panagiota

Paul Callus
Date: 6/5/2020 2:57:00 PM

Thank you Panagiota. Funny, but I had already replied to your comment!! Regards // paul

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 5/14/2020 5:44:00 AM

Beautiful. The power of rustling leaves. A mind teaser. Kind wishes, Kai

Paul Callus
Date: 5/14/2020 8:43:00 AM

Thank you, Kai. Have a nice day. // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/11/2020 10:46:00 AM

Wow. Cool thought (and moment) you captured. For me, this is what I like to see in haiku: simple language ... and observations, that makes you see something in a new way. A revelation in familiarity.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/11/2020 3:13:00 PM

Both your reaction and feedback are appreciated, Timothy...thank you. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/10/2020 10:05:00 PM

I love the connection of the leaves and scattered thoughts. This is wonderful Paul! I hope Tania see that! I loved this haiku. xxoo

Paul Callus
Date: 5/11/2020 2:52:00 PM

Thank you, Connie. I'm focusing a lot on haiku and tanka lately, and several of them have been accepted for publication. ~ regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 5/10/2020 2:10:00 PM

Fabulous imagery you captured the theme perfectly, for some reason i am sleeping better during lock down! Hope you and the family are keeping well. love to you all:-) Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2020 6:05:00 PM

So pleased you enjoyed it, Jan. This failed to make it to the finals! ~ So far we are getting on fine. Teachers and students have daily sessions online. Regards to all. Hugs // paul

Paghunda Zahid

Date: 5/10/2020 11:52:00 AM

Love it for its imagery

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2020 6:06:00 PM

Thank you, Paghunda. Regards // paul

Silent One

Date: 5/10/2020 11:19:00 AM

A great image in your poem... Fitting for the photo

Paul Callus
Date: 5/10/2020 11:28:00 AM

Thank you S-1. Hope you are keeping well. Regards // paul

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/9/2020 7:53:00 AM

This is a great poem Paul. Well done. I hope you have a nice day :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/9/2020 8:41:00 AM

Thank you so much, Heidi. Hope you have been regaining your strength a bit every day. May you have a lovely weekend. // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/8/2020 5:13:00 AM

Funny, but I wrote a poem and named it LEAVES about 2 weeks ago. I love your Haiku, one style I have never tried, will do one day. Our minds must be a mess Paul, we cram so much into them, wonder how our brains don't just explode like a watermelon! Well penned my friend. Warm regard and hugs, Jennifer.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/8/2020 12:40:00 PM

Thank you, Jenny; your visits always end up being lovely and pleasant. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/7/2020 2:23:00 PM

Hate those restless nights when your mind is bombarded with thoughts and you can't settle. You discribed it well Paul. Good luck Tom

Paul Callus
Date: 5/8/2020 12:37:00 PM

Thank you, Tom. I hate those nights, but sometimes I do manage to exchange them for some poetic lines! Regards // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 5/7/2020 2:14:00 PM

love this clever haiku, Paul - I hope you're keeping well

Paul Callus
Date: 5/8/2020 12:17:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed it, my friend. Thank you. So far all is well on the Western front :) Regards // paul

Panagiota Romios

Date: 5/7/2020 12:54:00 PM

Making this a FAV. Loved the combination of images with life Panagiota xx

Paul Callus
Date: 5/8/2020 12:35:00 PM

You merit a double 'thank you' Panagiota! Your lovely comments and fav are truly appreciated. Regards // paul

Charlie Smith

Date: 5/7/2020 11:55:00 AM

Great work Paul, best wishes...

Paul Callus
Date: 5/8/2020 12:34:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Charlie. Regards...take care! // paul

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 5/7/2020 11:41:00 AM

Oh, I like this a lot. Swirling in my mind. My best to you in the contest Paul! xomo

Paul Callus
Date: 5/8/2020 12:33:00 PM

And I like you comments and wishes, Maureen :) Thank you. Regards /x/ paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/7/2020 9:55:00 AM

Beautifully done, Paul. Swirling leaves, scattering thoughts, restless night..they all evoke movement.. just as you intended. All the best.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/8/2020 12:32:00 PM

Thank you for the meaningful feedback, Vijay. Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/7/2020 9:54:00 AM

Love it, Paul! There is beauty and unsettling in a restless night.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/8/2020 12:31:00 PM

Thank you, Kim. Sometimes restless nights can't be avoided, usually because we get over tired! Regards // paul