Get Your Premium Membership

Swirling Black

If you thought You could find him In the swirling black At the end of the night After he held your hand And told you to run You were wrong. If you thought You could find him At the end Of a lit cigarette Waiting for your name To blow up his phone You were wrong. He was at the end Of the swirling black In the bottom of the green Glass bottle It tasted like liquorice And bitter romance In the mottled light Of an early morning sunrise. He was at the end Of a lit cigarette Watching through Smoke rising in the Darkness Gone as quickly As you could inhale.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 8/23/2015 12:08:00 AM
Hannah, Congratulations on having your poem featured on the homepage. **SKAT**
Login to Reply
Date: 8/8/2015 12:07:00 AM
Hi Hannah, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
Login to Reply
Date: 8/5/2015 1:17:00 AM
Hey there, welcome to Poetrysoup, Hannah. "It tasted like liquorice And bitter romance" I am intrigued by your many memorable lines.... this is fantastic! A real pleasure to read your work! I will be definitely read the other you posted on here. The ending is brilliantly chilling. Always, Laura
Login to Reply
Date: 8/4/2015 9:32:00 PM
Hannah Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
Login to Reply
Tobin Avatar
Hannah Tobin
Date: 8/5/2015 1:12:00 AM
Hi SKAT :) It's such an honor to have you come and say hello! I am enjoying reading all the beautiful poems posted and hope someday I will be part of making something great, through helping others with their poetry. I would love love LOVE some feedback on the two poems I've already posted before I post some more. I hope to hear from you again soon and I will be visiting your page again to read some more of your work!

Book: Reflection on the Important Things