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Sweet Lover

'Love Story' Poetry Contest. Sponsor: Regina Mcintosh 1st Place. “I fell in love the way you fall asleep: slowly, and then all at once.” - John Green, "The Fault in our Stars." "Love is selfless. Love is respect. Love is infatuation. Love is more than all three combined." - Hiba Junaid. your lashes flutter when you open your eyes chocolate orbs, blown wide my favourite flavour it starts like that two souls – a little bit broken, a little forlorn raven locks to hide behind and skin moonlit parchment I think I must be a little bit gone lost in nose scrunches and cheeks all bunched up a healthy blush spread all over and those shy plunges my poor heart clenches it’s pouring outside and your clothes are drenched your body is shivering and your teeth are chattering yet the umbrella you hold is over my head eyebrows strewn together, worried I’ll catch a cold it’s not just the wind ruffling your hair, I think I love your heart and everything’s pure, this feeling blueberry snow you love without asking something in return it’s not just your heart, I think I love your soul I touch it’s beauty and I find a lover.

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Date: 5/10/2024 8:06:00 AM
Hiba, your poem on love delves into the profound aspects of love that transcend mere physicality and material possessions. It focuses on recognizing and cherishing the inner qualities of a person, using vivid descriptions and sensory language to evoke powerful emotions in the reader. Metaphors such as "chocolate orbs," "raven locks," "skin moonlit parchment," and "blueberry snow" enhance the visual and tactile experience, while comparing love to blueberry snow and a lover's soul adds layers of meaning to your work.
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/10/2024 8:23:00 AM
I cherish this comment so much <3333 Thank you for recognizing and appreciating the metaphors. I am grateful to every reader. God Bless.
Date: 5/9/2024 11:00:00 PM
Beautiful quotes and profound and very meaningful poem that depicts love and what it means and how an infatuated heart feels, youv captured them all so very well here in such eloquence! I especially love “ your body is shivering and your teeth are chattering yet the umbrella you hold is over my head“ now thats love really! Selfless n unconditional. Pleasure reading this. Congratulations on your win too
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/10/2024 12:25:00 AM
Thank you so much!!!! for writing such a sweet (pun intended) comment and for highlighting what you like the most, along with your interpretation of it. Reading this makes me so happy.
Date: 5/5/2024 10:08:00 PM
Wow I love this. Another fave for me tonight!
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/6/2024 11:45:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea <33 you made my day.
Date: 5/2/2024 11:53:00 AM
Dear Hiba, I loved the way you intertwine imagery and emotion of falling deeply for someone, cherishing both their outer and inner beauty. Yes, finding that love transcends physical attraction and encompasses selflessness and respect. Very wonderful Poem! - Blessings, Daniel
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/3/2024 3:09:00 AM
Thank you so much! This comment warmed my heart <3333
Date: 5/2/2024 9:27:00 AM
Your poem beautifully captures the essence of love and admiration. The imagery of fluttering lashes, chocolate orbs, and the metaphor of "my favourite flavour" sets a tender tone from the very beginning. The juxtaposition of vulnerability and strength in "two souls – a little bit broken, a little forlorn" adds depth to the emotional landscape.
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/2/2024 11:37:00 AM
omG thank you so much. comments like these always motivate the artist, no matter what form of art they create. I appreciate you <3

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