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Sweet Autumn Season

The season of change Rose lily and all others renew own colors Nature's new sunlight welcomes sweet Autumn season good bye to summer Body feels colder Taste new fruit juice and custard Mind carries new dreams For contest: Sponsored by Gail Doyle

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/18/2012 12:57:00 AM

very nice set of haiku, BL! I enjoyed this.

Robert Pettit

Date: 8/17/2012 5:59:00 PM

Nice trio of autumn haiku. However, check the syllable count in the first line of your second entry. You have six syllables there which is one too many. Just one suggestion: how about removing "new" in that line?

Bl Devnath
Date: 8/17/2012 8:43:00 PM

Many thanks, i have changed the line. Loved your kind guidance. Always bl

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/17/2012 2:58:00 PM

Very descriptive and creative work that you have penned in this one..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

Bl Devnath
Date: 8/17/2012 3:01:00 PM

Many thanks for stopping by on my write. Loved always,bl