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Surreal Nature

We set out at birth of day in search of serenity and bursts of discovery. I felt alive, almost new, like the morning mist and wide-eyed baby I carried on my back. Dawn’s filtered light stroked our cheeks promising a brilliant sunrise. “Soon”, I whispered to my rosy child who gazed in wonder, “very soon”. His coos, like a melody, pranced on delicate breeze, charming squirrels out of hiding. Tiny hands coaxed falling leaves to dance as I inhaled shapes of crisp autumn. Dawn's masterpiece invoked my own childlike awe, and I wore a smile like my favorite sweater. morning blushes in effortless smiles innocent once more Nature’s breath swirled, enchanting us as brittle leaves rustled underfoot. The branches above, almost bare, swayed to greet our attendance of autumn’s opening performance. In the distance, apple trees speckled with pink and white blossoms met the horizon. The picture of indescribable beauty stirred my spirit, and I turned to find my own brown eyes watching, content. My surroundings, surreal, were wrapped in our blushing smiles as my voice became a prayer of gratitude for earth and sky, mother and child, pale memories, vibrant reflections, and the joy of all to come. dawn creates an ageless splendor inspiring rebirth 10-2-2013

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Date: 10/25/2013 5:04:00 PM
Creatively written..Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!!Sara
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Date: 10/25/2013 3:28:00 PM
Congrad's on your haibun winning. Light & Love
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Date: 10/25/2013 1:10:00 PM
I am sorry I have been out of the loop for so long, I hope I can back into sync soon but many congratulations on your win Rhonda love xx
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Date: 10/25/2013 10:43:00 AM
Rhonda, congrats, awesome Haibun. Have yourself a sweet day.......... LOVE SKAT <3
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Date: 10/25/2013 9:52:00 AM
Congratulations Rhonda, nice Haibun Form ... LINDA
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Date: 10/25/2013 4:57:00 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, Rhonda
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:28:00 PM
I loved this.....I could see that beautiful mother and child, and the beauty surrounding .....it is all so wonderful ! Congratulations on this beauty!!
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Date: 10/24/2013 7:55:00 PM
beautifully penned haibun Rhonda, congrats on your win :)
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Date: 10/24/2013 5:59:00 PM
Gorgeous work, congrats.
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Date: 10/24/2013 5:29:00 PM
great write Rhonda....congrats on your win
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Date: 10/9/2013 1:31:00 AM
this is so beautiful. I think this particular contest has inspired many GEMS here at Soup.
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Date: 10/2/2013 5:13:00 PM
This is a very beautiful write my friend! It's nice to see you posting again Rhonda! You have done masterfully with this poem on the innocents and nature! I really enjoyed reading this awesome poem this evening! What a powerful piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/2/2013 12:57:00 PM
Wow, wonderful work. BG
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