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Sunset: the Red Sea and Sky

the red sea and sky resemble molten lava- - our passion erupts

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Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/8/2011 5:59:00 PM

Congrats Jack on an amazing win for this visual beauty Haiku luv..lost in mesmerizing words my friend..luv..

Janette Fisher

Date: 11/8/2011 11:42:00 AM

Many congrats on your wonderful contest winning haiku - luv Janette

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/8/2011 11:22:00 AM

Blazing hot passion! Wow! Super haiku, my friend. If this is for the Sunset contest, I think it will do very well. Love, Carolyn

Dinda Minardi

Date: 11/8/2011 9:18:00 AM

This is nice, between haiku and senryu.. You tried to mix both nature and humanity, which is great. Effortlessly great writing, Jack. Just tell me how did it work on you, the morning mood.. :))

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/8/2011 5:57:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "Sunset Haiku" contest Jack. Love, Carol

David Williams

Date: 11/8/2011 1:41:00 AM

Jack congrats on your win..David

Russell Sivey

Date: 11/7/2011 10:09:00 PM

Way to go Jack, another splendid Haiku! I really enjoyed reading this work of art! Perfect work!!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/7/2011 10:00:00 PM

JACK~;-) CONGRATULATIONS, thank you for supporting my SUNSET contest* this contest was awesome* I had to try a few HAIKUS of my own. Have a wonderful week, GOD BLESS,..p.d.

Gwendolen Song

Date: 11/7/2011 8:33:00 PM

Hi Jack...as I am reading Debbie's awesome advice below your poem and now heeding it, I am laughing my butt off....your lines were basically the same as those on my scratch paper as I tried to write for this. Molten lava love, man! In my poetry notebook, this kind of haiku is not strict and often referred to as American haiku. Gwendolen

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/7/2011 4:00:00 PM

no dear you have totally told the reader how to feel about the scene you made a judgement, it's a subjective opinion..you need to stay totally with OBJECTIVE facts...a red sky/lay upon the horizon--/waves rise [everything in mine is FACTUAL no opinion]