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Sun's Betrayal

Whored the moon 'neath ravaged warm tides, whence snowflakes caught fire channeling sea's frothy surrender in a vast edgy drink on the brink of a vengeful rush, whilst frigid oceans deviated mid murky depths of aimless asylum harbors, whorling faster to catch up with breaks of dawn blistering under betrayal of the sun

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 11/3/2016 5:25:00 PM
Such a beautifully penned poem, Paloma. Your poetic imagination was in overdrive w/this masterpiece. You write poems like the great ones of yesterday's lore. Elegant and expressive as all outdoors. Touche. Love and joy and more love to you. RW
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Date: 11/2/2016 5:56:00 AM
How I missed this one I don't know, I must've been in the dark or something. Betrayed by the sun, nothing but clouds and gloomy skies are looming when what you need is a bright beautiful day. Damn sun...you can't trust it. This was sad and lonely but beautifully written Paloma.
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Date: 11/2/2016 6:05:00 AM
No worries Chris, this site can be somewhat confusing. I'm sure I've missed a few myself. Many thanks!
Date: 10/29/2016 7:44:00 AM
This has left me speechless, Paloma, such strong images. Way to go! Worth multiple reads.
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Date: 10/29/2016 4:32:00 PM
Now you've left me speechless! Very much appreciated.

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