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her naked body kissed by the sun's rays - she blushes scarlet Contest my best monoku – Sponsored by PD Linda 04~02~16 (New poem as I consider my other entries are not good enough to be my best)

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/14/2016 7:46:00 PM

Congrats for your win, Jan. it was so cute.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/15/2016 1:36:00 AM

Thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 4/14/2016 11:53:00 AM

Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2016 3:23:00 PM

Many thanks James:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 4/14/2016 11:51:00 AM

Second time round congratulating you on this winning monoku! By the way, my earlier opinion still holds, Jan! hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2016 3:23:00 PM

Many thanks Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/14/2016 7:50:00 AM

CONGRATS ON YOUR WIN MY LOVELY FRIEND. lOVED ALWAYS, BL

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2016 7:51:00 AM

Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/13/2016 8:41:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations on your Amazing, One line win. Stop by my blog "On The Hunt" and enjoy my happy dance or not!!! LOL... Luv ~LINDA~"

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2016 1:50:00 AM

Thanks for a great contest PD - as for your happy dance you could do with putting on a few pounds - you are stick thin lol:-) hugs jan xx

Carrie Richards

Date: 4/13/2016 8:15:00 PM

Ouch !!! Hope that blush doesn't peel !!! LOL !! Cute one, Jan!! Congrats to you!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2016 1:49:00 AM

Thanks so much Carrie:-) hugs jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 4/8/2016 8:08:00 PM

Hi Jan, another wonderful write from your pen. So much can be said in one line Jan and this line says quite a bit. I'm the blushing scarlet type so i always keep as much of my body covered when in the sun. Could be quite dangerous. Both serious and light hearted my friend. I am going to fave this Monoku and keep it with my others for reading when i wish. Good luck in the contest Jan. Hugs....Mike. XX

Jan Allison
Date: 4/8/2016 11:30:00 PM

Thanks Mike yes I intended to go for the double meaning with the poem - I too am more the tomato type and try not to get caught especially as we discovered after dad's death that his skin cancer was malignant melanoma and not basal skin cancer as he had originally told us - he had lung and bowel too :-( hugs Jan xx

Brian Strand

Date: 4/4/2016 7:44:00 AM

Nice work Jan and thks for yr always welcome comments on my endeavours.Have a good day.rgds Brian

Jan Allison
Date: 4/4/2016 7:52:00 AM

Thanks Brian - wish the sun was shining -we are practicing for typical 'summer' weather rain rain rain lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/2/2016 10:09:00 PM

Awesome wordplay, Jan ... loved the double meanings. It's a Sunku :D

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2016 7:05:00 AM

Aww thanks Timothy I'm glad you enjoyed this one:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/2/2016 5:23:00 PM

Beautiful monoku for contest my lovely friend. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 5:26:00 PM

Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/2/2016 3:40:00 PM

GREAT job and with the fun pictures too, Jan. Sure hope she loves this one!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 5:25:00 PM

Thanks so much Andrea:-) :-) I hope Linda likes it too:-) I had only entered 2 of the other contests so hope a new poem will place better this time:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Palli

Date: 4/2/2016 2:01:00 PM

Very clever! Good luck in contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 2:03:00 PM

Thanks so much Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray

Date: 4/2/2016 1:53:00 PM

Most would blush if caught in the nude. Brilliant Jan. You can master any form of poetry.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 1:55:00 PM

LOL Jean - I was going for humour but also a serious side with the sun making her red:-) ... have I ever gone topless hee hee hee that secret will never be revealed lol :-) :-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 4/2/2016 11:53:00 AM

Yeah wait til the wrinkles set in! Great poetry ...not so great when results show up 40 years later! LOL

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 11:56:00 AM

Yes and sadly some people 'die' for a tan and get malignant melanoma - i try and stay out of the sun as much as possible have never been a sun goddess:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 4/2/2016 11:21:00 AM

All you do is good Jan...the only time it is no good is when its still in your head...and not down on paper lol...god bless...good luck...but you don't need it...^WW^

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2016 11:23:00 AM

Aww thanks ^WW^ I had only submitted 2 poems to the previous contest which got 6th place and an N/A so i hope to do better with this one:-) hugs Jan xx