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Summer Girl

She had the perfect posture, she was an African American girl Watching as the breezes about her dress did whirl The warmth of July passed through the air And there she was just standing there She wore a fine printed, lime green dress Where the wind did gently caress She was summer in a glass mixed with ice And she walked across the street so precise Every man observed with a pleased eye Every woman wished it were her that the men had spied She was a summer girl Soft and elegant and flawless as a pearl

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Bryan Bolton

Date: 12/10/2009 8:16:00 AM

Like this one, creates nice visuals

Aleera De La Keur

Date: 7/23/2009 6:50:00 PM

Excellent write, it made me think of summers past....Aleera

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 7/22/2009 6:22:00 PM

Wonderful imagry in this pretty little poem! Very nice, I like it. And thank you for your comments on my featured poem also. ~Trudy~

Amber Plocica

Date: 7/22/2009 12:18:00 PM

Hi Laura This poem is so refreshing and lovely. My uncle told me to read your poetry. I like the way you write. This poem made me smile and feel good inside. X's and O's ...Amber

Adell Foster

Date: 7/20/2009 11:15:00 AM

Very well written Laura, great imagery and tone flowing throughout the read. Thank you for sharing and for your welcome comments on "Hawk Eyed" God's Love and Many Blessings, Always, Adell

James Fraser

Date: 7/19/2009 3:13:00 PM

Delightful poem Laura>>James

Sandra Hudson

Date: 7/19/2009 2:54:00 PM

She sounds like a cocktail in motion! great imagery!, thanks for your comments - AA

John Rhinem

Date: 7/19/2009 1:32:00 PM

~ "You Have 'Always' Been Such A Great Writer Within My Views; And I Am Quite Sure, Many Others Also!!!":):) ~ "Mesmerizing & Enchanting Write Dear, Of A Beautiful Lady" ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You & Your Loves,' Always & Forever, And Beyond, John!!!":):) Smile, let's go view another one of "Your Fabulous Writes" ~

John Rhinem

Date: 7/19/2009 1:27:00 PM

~ "Hello Precious, Priceless, Talented & Beautiful Laura Mckenzie!!!":):) ~ I truly hope that "Your Beauties Weekend," is going wonderfully and perfectly for "Your Splendors Dear Lady!!!?":):) ~ "Every woman wished that it were her that the men had spied - She was a summer girl - Soft and elegant and flawless as a pearl." ~ Smile, hmm, that kind of sounds like "You;" except, for the ethnicity of course ~ Smile, "This Is So Very Beautiful Again Laura!!!":):) ~ Cont. ~

John Rhinem

Date: 7/19/2009 1:16:00 PM

~ "She had the perfect posture she was an African American girl - Watching as the breezes about her dress did whirl - The warmth of July pasted through the air - And there she was just standing there." ~ What a lovely flowing stanza and beautiful picture this is here dear!!!:):) ~ And I can only imagine how very enchanting she truly was/is....For "Your Gifted Brush, Painted Her So Very Lovingly & Splendidly!!!":):) ~ Cont. ~

Michael Jordan

Date: 7/15/2009 8:23:00 AM

Laura this poem is very well written and I truly enjoyed the read - God Bless, MJ

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/14/2009 7:07:00 AM

Beyond beautiful. Outstanding writing Laura as usual. Love, Carol

Brian Strand

Date: 7/14/2009 1:36:00 AM

A beuatiful vignette on the eye Laura.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments today

C. E. Mcmullin

Date: 7/13/2009 7:19:00 PM

Kind of lady, we men would all love to meet- You paint a beautiful picture, perhap's of yourself?? poet butterfly

Christopher Higgins

Date: 7/13/2009 6:39:00 PM

I am so loving this piece my friend..She was summer in a glass mixed with ice...I want that awesome line....Soft and elegant and flawless as a pearl...brilliant way to end this classy piece.