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Subtraction Man

He used to be three dimensional and then he became two I know it seems far fetched But I’m telling you it’s true In two dimensions he could still depict three If people didn’t look to closely They’d believe what they’d see His paper thin personality once colourful and cool Gradually became faded no longer able to fool Winds of change kept blowing Two dimensions turned into one Without any depth there one was destined to be none Not a soul remembers him He simply faded away A whisper from yesterday Who had nothing real to say

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Eric Cohen

Date: 7/10/2020 12:29:00 PM

Reading this one again "for the first time." This is great. -- Eric

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/10/2020 3:04:00 PM

Thanks Eric.:0)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/9/2020 1:16:00 AM

This is really neat, Rick. Turning geometry into an allegory of the man who gradually lost his personality (or I guess 'depth' would be more accurate). I think I'll add this to my favorites because I appreciate the creativity of the piece.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/9/2020 8:04:00 AM

Much appreciated Timothy.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/22/2020 9:18:00 AM

Hi Richard, this excellent piece does ring so true. Sometimes, some of us feel like this well before the end. Your creativity is shining, my friend. We all wish to be more than a whisper, when comes the end. Another excellent write from your golden pen, Richard. This piece flows so well from the beginning to the end. Has to be a fav, Have a wonderful Sunday, stay blessed....Mike.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/22/2020 11:11:00 AM

Thanks for all your visits this morning Mike. Blessings to you as well.

Paul Callus

Date: 3/12/2020 11:02:00 AM

This is cool, Richard. Somehow reminds me of the painter who kept diluting his paint till finally all his work faded and came to nought. ~ Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/12/2020 11:05:00 AM

I always thought I was deluding myself when in fact I may have been diluting myself instead, *lol*

Robert Kinard

Date: 3/8/2020 8:13:00 AM

Nicely done my friend, you make wish I wrote it.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/8/2020 9:07:00 AM

Thanks Robert. ;0)

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 3/6/2020 11:42:00 AM

If only he has changed his ways. Great title for this piece. Awesome write Richard. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/6/2020 12:03:00 PM

Thanks Cecilia. Hugs Rick.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/4/2020 8:11:00 AM

Great poetry... as always. What a great build up to the ending.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/6/2020 12:04:00 PM

Thanks Eileen. ;0)

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/25/2020 9:40:00 AM

WoW! Richard, I agree with Andrea, this is one of your best. I liked the build up that led to the end. He went from something to nothing and eventually he was no more. Your skill and talent never ceases to amaze me:-) Alexis

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/25/2020 11:03:00 AM

You are kind Alexis. Hugs Rick.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/18/2020 6:25:00 PM

wow, this is REALLY great, Richard. One of your best. Fave for me. I just love how he got smaller and smaller and then became a whisper with nothing to say.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/19/2020 7:17:00 AM

Thanks Andrea.

Brooklyn Cruz

Date: 2/17/2020 2:40:00 PM

This has a very good message; I'm glad I read it. I love it, good job :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/19/2020 7:17:00 AM

Thanks Brooklyn.

Ts Poetry

Date: 2/17/2020 9:25:00 AM

This isn't paperthin as there is much depth....give me depth any day

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/17/2020 9:48:00 AM

Thanks TS. ;0)

Robert Kinard

Date: 2/17/2020 6:38:00 AM

Wow, I like how you did this, and a good story to think about. thanks for sharing.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/17/2020 8:02:00 AM

Thanks Robert. ;0)

Harry Horsman

Date: 2/17/2020 12:54:00 AM

The change of generations, historics are just that, history. Another intriguing poem from you Richard, always to give the reader, something to think about...love it..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/17/2020 8:02:00 AM

Much appreciated Harry.

Silent One

Date: 2/15/2020 10:33:00 AM

Interesting way of looking at him, maybe he was happy to fade away without being remembered... I like how you did this..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/15/2020 10:43:00 AM

Thanks Silent. ;0)

Linda Milgate

Date: 2/13/2020 11:56:00 AM

Love this, too true!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/15/2020 10:17:00 AM

Thanks Linda. Hugs Rick.

Charles Messina

Date: 2/11/2020 5:16:00 AM

A lost soul. I have some friends who have become this guy. Cool write, Rick. ~Charlie

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/11/2020 8:04:00 AM

Thanks Charles. Much appreciated.

Franci Hoffman

Date: 2/10/2020 11:01:00 AM

A smooth flowing Quatrain and a good story. Well done.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/10/2020 1:12:00 PM

Thanks Franci. ;0)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/9/2020 3:59:00 PM

I think the last dimension was dementia! Enjoyed this muse greatly, Richard. Thanks, Gershon

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/10/2020 8:02:00 AM

Thanks Gershon. ;0)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 2/7/2020 12:14:00 PM

Sad that some people do fade into nothing - ' A whisper from yesterday who had nothing to say.' A deep write which is truly thought provoking Blessings, Jenn.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/8/2020 8:11:00 AM

Thanks Jennifer. Hugs Rick.

Anna Hopper

Date: 2/7/2020 11:51:00 AM

Awesome! I love the flow of the words and the story behind them!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/7/2020 11:52:00 AM

Thanks Anna, Hugs Rick.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/7/2020 3:43:00 AM

- Interesting, Richard ... in the end the dust blows away .... - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/7/2020 8:20:00 AM

Thanks Anne-Lise. HugsRick.

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 2/6/2020 5:28:00 PM

Nice write Richard,liked your rhyme and flow bringing home great expression too.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/6/2020 6:08:00 PM

Thanks Gordon.

Leo Larry Amadore

Date: 2/6/2020 3:38:00 PM

Thoughtful, clever, amusing, well-worded and metered, and a reflection of some validity when considered as applicable to many of us (perhaps to my shivering self?) and to our diminishing opinions of our own thoughts and writings.....

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/6/2020 4:11:00 PM

Thanks Leo, I appreciate the thought and the visit.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 2/6/2020 1:44:00 PM

So melancholy - and (perhaps ironically) multi layered, well thought out write, Richard-

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/6/2020 4:11:00 PM

Thanks Michelle.

Daniel Turner

Date: 2/6/2020 10:35:00 AM

Reminds me of the song John Lennon wrote called. "Nowhere Man" Richard, eventually we all fade away.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/6/2020 10:37:00 AM

Do you think so? Thanks for commenting. ;0)