Stranger

Unwritten Absence Poetry Contest. Stranger Maybe, the unwritten absence in my poetry is the stranger in me you do not see The fear I feel, yet people call me courageous The dreams I made and haven't met, outrageous The hidden love, waiting to be expressed To someone who doesn't know, at best That sunset, I forgot to stop and see The message I missed, as the river passed by me The loneliness from this absence, as I roam thinking it is due to my empty home The longing restlessness of being caged Screaming for freedom from war that's waged Time to turn unwritten secrets into striking words Then, fly away silently with the birds To make a new lively presence known, To know that on paper the truth is shown Heidi Sands 9/20/23 Placed 2nd

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Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/30/2023 7:41:00 AM

Back with BIG congrats on your podium win, my friend.

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/30/2023 8:24:00 AM

Thank you Vijay. I appreciate you :)

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 9/30/2023 6:42:00 AM

A striking and poignant poem Heidi. So many great lines...I enjoyed reading it thrice! :)

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/30/2023 8:24:00 AM

Thank you Linda. I am happy to hear that :)

Ink Empress

Date: 9/29/2023 3:41:00 AM

“Hidden love waiting to be expressed” “ time to turn unwritten secrets into striking words”” such evocative and soul hitting lines throughout this well crafted take for the prompt. Fits the theme of the prompt very well. I absolutely loved reading this! Thank you for sharing and congratulations on winning.

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/29/2023 6:12:00 AM

Thank you very much. I enjoyed this :)

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/23/2023 7:28:00 AM

WoW! Heidi, This is so well written. I enjoyed it from start to finish. Nice title and content. The last stanza expressed your overall message very well-Alexis

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/23/2023 7:48:00 AM

Thank you very much. I appreciate your kind comments :)

Joseph May

Date: 9/22/2023 3:14:00 PM

Letting the unwritten words take flight, Very nicely penned Heidi

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/22/2023 4:22:00 PM

Thank you very much Joseph. I appreciate your comments :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/21/2023 5:41:00 AM

That sunset, I forgot to stop and see The message I missed, as the river passed by me---The longing restlessness of being caged Screaming for freedom from war that's waged--How wonderfully poetic my friend! A FAVE from me for this superb poem, Heidi.

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/21/2023 5:59:00 AM

Thank you very much Vijay. I appreciate your kind feedback and you considering it a Fave. It makes today special. I hope you enjoy the day. :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/21/2023 5:03:00 AM

- Sometimes it's better to leave unwritten secrets alone, Heidi - (at least on social media such as FB or P-Soup :) - Lovely written, my friend ... have a nice day :) - hugs

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/21/2023 5:55:00 AM

Yes, that too Anne-Lise. Thank you for your visit and comment. I hope you have a nice day. Hugs :)

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 9/20/2023 6:19:00 PM

Such a wonderful and creative write Heidi. 'the unwritten absence in my poetry is the stranger in me you do not see'. I think a lot of people try to hide their true selves behind their words when it comes to poetry. A fantastic poem my friend.

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/20/2023 6:27:00 PM

I appreciate your kind feedback and support. Thank you for your input Jerry :)

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/20/2023 4:44:00 PM

Your ability to construct this poem was incredibly imaginative! You possess the talent of a skilled artisan, crafting words into a tapestry of beauty. Time to transform hidden truths into mesmerizing sentences.

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/20/2023 4:57:00 PM

Wow, thank you for your very kind comment Sotto. I appreciate it. I hope you have a nice evening :)

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 9/20/2023 2:48:00 PM

how powerful....'time to turn unwritten secrets into striking words.' It resonated with me on so many levels. Good luck with the contest. Sara

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/20/2023 3:21:00 PM

Thank you Sara. I appreciate your comment and I am happy to hear that :)