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Morning Awakening: 1877-78
by Eva Gonzales

Love lingers, in the objects of stone left behind, holding pleasing recollections of welcome footfalls; the painful memories, most, spent of love declined. Those last few months of harborless shores, the squalls fade, as I gaze on the jade keeper left bedside, holding pleasing recollections of welcome footfalls. The blade of horn, carved with love's protection, bides. An owl of stone my guardian makes nightmares fade, as I gaze on the jade keeper left bedside, I have keys given me in faith, your love declared. Though trust given, never was withdrawn, never died. An owl of stone my guardian makes nightmares fade, and over gold-amber earrings; I still cry. Yes, you are goodly gone, and that I truly know; though trust given never was withdrawn, never died. Happy times of kisses warm, of love bestowed, love lingers, in the objects of stone left behind. Yes, you are goodly gone and that I truly know, the painful memories, most, spent of love declined.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 6/24/2015 9:03:00 PM
The form really suits the subject and tone of this write. Every day and every contest is a learning process. I love the nuances, the gentle caress of a word appropriately used...oh I so appreciate how you do it! Thanks, Deb. Congrats!
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Date: 6/24/2015 3:33:00 PM
Beautiful piece Debbie....when all else fades, love lingers on....Congrats on a great win....hugs
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Date: 6/24/2015 12:23:00 PM
Second line last stanza should be first line stanza one. Unless I am mistaken which is entirely possible.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/24/2015 3:56:00 PM
Thanks Richard I think I have rewritten this at least 5 times!
Date: 6/24/2015 8:34:00 AM
An incredible write. I see you took some poetic licence with the second line in the last stanza. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 6/24/2015 11:44:00 AM
Hey Richard let me know what you are seeing if it needs correcting I'd like to do that THANKS>
Date: 6/24/2015 1:37:00 AM
Debbie, Congratulations on your win. **SKAT**
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Date: 6/24/2015 12:54:00 AM
this is a sweet win DG. PD
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Date: 6/23/2015 9:20:00 PM
Congrats for the win. It is sure a classy poem, Debs!
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Date: 6/23/2015 9:10:00 PM
Lovely write, Debbie. congratulations. A work to be proud of. Viv x
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Date: 6/23/2015 12:39:00 PM
great poem Debbie congrats on placing hugs
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Date: 11/30/2014 2:03:00 AM
Sweet win, ~SKAT~
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Date: 11/27/2014 5:57:00 PM
AHA, I got it. As I read it, I was trying to figure out what form you were using (I had not seen the form when I began reading) As I got to the end I was able to realize it was terzanelle. that form is so awesome for a poem like this one. big congrats for your well deserved win.
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Date: 11/26/2014 9:43:00 AM
Very nice, Debbie. Congrats on your top placement...I like keepsakes better than objects, any reason you didn't use the word on your poem itself? Objects sounds so unromantic.
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Date: 11/26/2014 11:01:00 AM
hmmmm I did use Keepsakes in the title a very prominent place so I'm a bit puzzled by the comment?
Date: 11/24/2014 8:45:00 AM
Hi Debbie great. Congrats on win ..love rajat
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Date: 11/24/2014 8:40:00 AM
Beautifully written Terzanelle. Congratulations on your high win Debbie.
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Date: 11/23/2014 9:49:00 AM
Debbie, every time I try to write a Terzanelle .... I tears-em-up. Fantastic job with this form and a magnificently written poem. I can feel the longing and lose of those who stay ashore as love sets sail leaving only stone memories to sustain it.
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Date: 11/23/2014 2:00:00 AM
excellent Debbie congrats on win
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Date: 11/22/2014 11:32:00 PM
Debbie a superb write n an awesome win! Big congrats !
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Date: 11/22/2014 8:18:00 PM
Great write and win Debbie...Congrats
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Date: 11/22/2014 5:38:00 PM
This has a medieval quality to it...its a lovely piece. Congrats on your big win. BG
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Date: 11/22/2014 5:18:00 PM
One more thing Debbie, I have noticed some of your comments in the blogs. I love your huge heart. I am proud to know you. God Bless and Lots Of Love.
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Date: 11/22/2014 5:15:00 PM
Brilliant write Debbie. Congratulations on your huge win. Fav.Lots Of Love.
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Date: 11/22/2014 3:59:00 PM
love the terzanelle form you've sued with the repeat lines - great poem - many congrats:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/9/2012 8:07:00 PM
I am never disappointed while reading your poems.......this one sounds old-world, and classical....melancholy and beautiful. It hit me hard...that last line,....... as our family lost a treasured troubled soul this week.....but his love lingers on. Thank you for this poem. I needed these words today.
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Date: 11/8/2012 11:14:00 AM
Interesting structure/format... beautiful poem, Debbie... Terry
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Date: 11/8/2012 10:12:00 AM
Intresting use of language here! You use some old English phrases here. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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