Stir

Written: February 28, 2024 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Mayhem prevails as calm dries and stirs rise. A ruckus erupts as words and deeds blend. Oh, the wrath, related storm, and squall size. Building burning blaze, to draw in hearts trend. Dance and bustle, spark the soulful lost fire. Wrath symphony loudly incites the crowd. Rumpus drew seeing their whimsies were dire. Slashes and ripples, ruffled wings, brisk loud. Cloud voices, balk colder, fire with purpose. Cyclone whirl, heat, and mayhem hurl the mind. Through life, wards meet in a stirring service Spoons, fluff, defiance, and keenness behind A spark of hope with all this lapse and strife. Grief may spark split, but it can propel life.

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Constance La France

Date: 3/9/2024 2:29:00 PM

Sotto, congratulations on your win in my contest, wonderful writing, blessings, Constance

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/7/2024 1:21:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your lovely "Stir" write/quote. Love your last line. Have a great day with your wonderful win..................

Krishnanand Guptar

Date: 3/7/2024 8:41:00 AM

As usual a masterly diction which leaves one aghast. I wonder how you have acquired such a wide range of fitting words for all your poems, master Sotto. Congrats for your placement in this contest. Wish you a wondrous day.

Valsa George

Date: 2/29/2024 10:44:00 PM

There is mayhem, ruckus and strife in life. We experience them almost on a daily basis. But beneath all such restless stir, there is calm. "A spark of hope with all this lapse and strife. Grief may spark split, but it can propel life." This concluding couplet is the crux of life and the right perspective. Beautiful sonnet. As you are a master in rhymes, sonnet I feel is an easy poetic form for you. I do not doubt about the placement you are going to get !

Josefina Costales

Date: 2/29/2024 4:05:00 PM

I always thought sonnets were of a romantic mood. But your poem though I don't feel the romance, it's full of words dancing, bustling, strife, mayhem, ruckus---quite a stir really. Very clever path you've laid out in the search of hope and life beyond the grief. Thinking of doing a sonnet, one of these days. I hope it won't be too much work.:)

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/29/2024 3:58:00 PM

SP, sounds like amid all this chaos it's possible that some good may come of it. We certainly hope so. There have been times people learned from strife and changed for a while, or put mechanisms in place to foster peaceful solutions.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/29/2024 5:37:00 AM

Spark of hope indeed is needed to exit the travails that haunt. I like the positive spin!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/29/2024 1:50:00 AM

You certainly stirred things up with your poem on the same subject. Your poetic acumen is at its best.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 2/28/2024 4:53:00 PM

I'm sincerely impressed with your take on the contest topic (Stir). Your words made me stop and think of my own life when things were chaotic and 'stirred' where 'heat and mayhem hurled my mind.' Your hopeful last two lines brought your poem into a wise perspective: "Grief may spark split, but it can propel life." My dad frequently told me, "With turmoil comes great change and a shift in your life." Your poem resonated with me, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Joseph May

Date: 2/28/2024 4:00:00 PM

Storms that end with a silver lining of hope, Very nicely penned Sotto

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 2/28/2024 2:52:00 PM

This poem had a wonderful story. I liked how description lead to a fascinating conclusion.

Jay Narain

Date: 2/28/2024 9:26:00 AM

Nice poem with great imagery and metaphors.