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Still Cloudy

I long to be petty, a giggle a squeal, I cant be this person, this sadness I feel. I'm fighting against the black clouds that confine, perhaps holding out for a signal or sign. There's sun and there's warmth, there's the hope now it's spring, I still can't reach out from this chasm I'm in. A glimmer is there once a day now perhaps, I know I'm just waiting for time to elapse. The children run round, I so long to join in, But all I can here is the noise and the din. This grief, it's a journey no one can assist, I'll fight my way out of this black colored mist.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 3/25/2010 4:50:00 PM
Carolyne, congratulations on your worthy poem feature this week. Agape, Moses
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Date: 3/23/2010 3:34:00 AM
Congratulations Carolyne, on your poetry feature this week. Smiles, Dane Ann
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Date: 3/22/2010 5:42:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Carolyne. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/22/2010 4:55:00 AM
Congrats on the featured poem---well done!! cloudy with a chance of ice cream?
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Date: 3/21/2010 6:29:00 PM
Been there and it can be difficult to fly again ... smile ... Welcome to PoetrySoup, Carolyne and congratulations on having your writing selected this week at PoetrySoup!! Hope you read more soon.
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Date: 3/21/2010 5:16:00 PM
Congratulations on your poem being featured this week. Well deserved one. Keep n sharing your talent. Ernilando
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Date: 3/21/2010 3:09:00 PM
I feel the pain that you have Carolyne, for I too am on a journey of pain that I must take alone. I pray that God will comfort you even when you do not feel anyone beside you in this time. Best wishes, Christopher.
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Date: 3/21/2010 12:24:00 PM
Carolyne, congratulations! A suggestion:first stanza fourth verse. The comma demands a hesitation that disrupts the the rhythm. try dropping the comma and replace it with "or".
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Date: 3/21/2010 12:20:00 PM
Many congrats on your featured piece. Rgds Janette
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Date: 3/17/2010 2:23:00 AM
Keep fighting the black mist Carolyne and one day soon you will see the sunshine and embrace it like a long lost friend - Thanks for sharing such heartfelt write -:)
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