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Steps

 Take them up a bit
Step down and disconnect yet
Well oriented

Follow the rhythm
Fall into run, then schism
Palladium's glow

Hang on, two flights left
Three ahead then go right
Welcome home, goodnight

All this time, and the elevator still remains 'Out of Order.'

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Poet Destroyer A Date: 7/16/2012 4:11:00 AM Hi TIm, stopping by to say good night~PD Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/17/2012 7:27:00 PM haha, Tim, I love the ending of this. And how the elevator is still out of order. thanks for your comment. I love writing sonnets, I do. Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 4/17/2012 2:56:00 PM you make me rave, tim... a collection of delight and surprises... into the winners' list!!.. fantastic!..:) huggs! Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 4/16/2012 5:48:00 AM Good one..Got a chuckle and don't know if you intended it to be funny...Thanks for stopping by..I appreciate the little note about me leaving out a word in my work "Corrosion And Rust"...I wrestled with that line for I was trying to a count of 8,6,8,6..I tried all kinds of ways to make it work so I left it without the I or we....I figured the human mind would say I or we should be there..Thanks again..Sara Login to Reply Tim B Date: 4/16/2012 11:56:00 AM I did intend a chuckle :). Yes, on your poem I did surmise that you may have done it on purpose, but thought I would make sure. You are right though, the mind does generally interpret the word as being there. Thanks for stopping by.

Laila Andresen Mjelde Date: 4/16/2012 4:31:00 AM Nice piece! ;0) xoxo - Laila Login to Reply

Elliott Bowe The Drunken Poet Date: 4/16/2012 2:14:00 AM Wow great write. Login to Reply