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Stepping Towards We

I had never felt a part of the we Not sure how I was supposed to be I stood on tiptoes trying to see Wondering if there was room for me I floated at the edges like smoke Laughing imperceptibly at a joke Wanting to be like other folk Yet in my own silence I would soak Wondering if others felt the same way Lost between words that people say Wondering if they should leave or stay Just wanting, wishing for a part to play It took a smile a glint in an eye Looking at me, I wondered why Then he walked over and said hi His name was Joe a regular guy All it took was two to be a we Before long two became twenty three They were okay with me being me All of us different that was the key Within a group I learned how to be The me within the we

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BE Bailey

Date: 10/23/2014 8:49:00 AM

Awesome piece Richard. I enjoyed this piece so much and love the way you put it together. Big ups!! "B"

Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/19/2014 12:15:00 AM

It almost feels like an elaborate sequel to that poem you write awhile back, Timothy's Bridge. It touches familiar notes. We is a very special state to be in... and I mean this as a compliment, but your last stanza reminded of the wisdom and cutesy rhyme found in Dr. Suess.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2014 5:35:00 AM

Interesting comment and perspective. Having you back reminds me of how much I missed you while you were gone.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 9/15/2014 11:46:00 PM

Nice write Richard... Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/15/2014 11:54:00 PM

:0)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/7/2014 7:05:00 PM

I was expecting something completely different here, and you took this in a different direction, you have a way of making us feel we are in the persons shoes, again, great poem!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2014 8:27:00 AM

Thanks Arthur, through poetry we can live many lives.

Michelle Bailey

Date: 9/6/2014 11:38:00 AM

wonderful, when i read your poems its as if we feel the same as the 2 i have read so far is like my history in yours, im looking forward to reading more

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2014 8:26:00 AM

I am honored my work resonates with you. Thanks!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/6/2014 12:49:00 AM

Its so easy to be in a huge crowd yet somehow alone,and yet not so difficult if the crowd We are in are genuine friends who accept us for who We are.Its a nice feeling when We can be ourselves and respected for our believes,and ideas,even if somehow all different from eachother.I am going to favor this poem.Might need it in hand along the way,as a reminder to be who I am,wherever I am,no matter what- Charma [btw, tnks for your encouraging comments on my humble verse]

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2014 8:29:00 AM

My pleasure Charmaine. Thanks for your always thoughtful comments.

J. R. Corbin

Date: 9/5/2014 1:33:00 PM

This is fantastic, Richard. Loneliness sucks, so being part of something always helps. Gives us something to live for, I think. Your have expressed it wisely here, my friend. Thanks! Jim

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2014 4:31:00 PM

Thanks J.R.

Christine Costello

Date: 9/5/2014 11:11:00 AM

Great write-one to ponder again and again. Fav'd it. :-) Christine

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2014 4:31:00 PM

Awww thanks Christine.

Poet Tacito

Date: 9/5/2014 10:32:00 AM

Ahhhh, this gave me many man-goosebumps. I truly enjoyed this!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2014 4:32:00 PM

How do they differ from lady goosebumps??? Inquiring minds want to know. *lol*

Monterey Sirak

Date: 9/5/2014 8:22:00 AM

WE is a beautiful word, like US. But sometimes it is hard to step outside our solitude and be brave enough to allow ourselves to be included. You stepped into the circle of others and it turned out great.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2014 8:47:00 AM

In reality although I am part of different groups a part of me still feels seperate from the we.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/5/2014 4:43:00 AM

I work with autistic students Richard oh how many of them would love to be 'part of the we' and have a true friend but they find it so so difficult. A fabulous write i especially love the final stanza and are finally whole. hugs jan xxx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2014 7:46:00 AM

We are wired to be part of community, I try to be aware of people and make them feel included. Hugs and thanks Jan.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/5/2014 3:43:00 AM

WE.....a lovely pronoun. So glad you have a support group, Richard. You expressed this so well.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2014 7:42:00 AM

For me being active in sports, I have developed a network of friends, kinda like Cheers without the beer. I had met my friend Joe at sixteen when I was into roller skating. He thought I was a good skater and came over and said hi. We had been friends for sixteen years until I moved to BC.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/5/2014 2:11:00 AM

This is a very sweet write Richard! Turning from me to we n then expanding we is a great wonder of life! Much appreciate the message here!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2014 7:47:00 AM

Thanks Upma.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/5/2014 1:42:00 AM

Dear Richard, As a child I had the same insecurities you express so eloquently. Sometimes it's a struggle to fit in, but now you have many friends who admire and support you. The ending of your poem was so uplifting. God bless, Carolyn

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2014 7:52:00 AM

I think the attraction of the soup is the appeal of the we, we are taking what for some is a solitary activity and sharing it with a wider community. The exchange of creative energy is an amazing thing. God bless you as well Carolyn, hugs Rick.

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/4/2014 8:11:00 PM

Wow, well you had me until the twenty three part, thought you were writing my story, This is a great story about how a family is born from a smile. I liked that line "The me within the we" I would like to know what you based this poem on, it was good sweetie.

Casarah Nance
Date: 9/5/2014 4:27:00 PM

Oh okay cool, Now that I know it was a personal experience it fits better. :) hugs sweetie xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2014 7:32:00 AM

When I was a kid we moved so much I was always striving to fit in. It was difficult always being the new kid. Most other people had long established friendships.

Tim Smith

Date: 9/4/2014 8:07:00 PM

This is great Richard...All it takes is one person to make a difference in someone's life...Joe is a remarkable guy and should be commended for his actions.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2014 7:36:00 AM

Joe is a friend from when I was sixteen, sadly he drifted away but I am still friends with four other guys we hung out with. They are all back in Ontario but we get together when I go out to see my mom.