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Static

Forever lost in space and time, These stagnant seconds are divine. With steady hand and shaky mind, Pursuing something we’ll never find. Drawn out hours that never cease, The mental crypt allows no release. Passing moments as best we can, Devising yet another ill-thought plan. Time stands still for those that wait, Unable to face their looming fate. Evading restrictions of endless rules; Brushing shoulders with mindless fools. Forever lost in space and time, Those static seconds were divine. Forever wishing we could rewind: This is the delusion of our kind.

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/3/2010 8:17:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round Charlotte. I wish you the best in the finals. Love, Carol

Adeleke Adeite

Date: 6/3/2010 4:55:00 AM

Hey! Congrats on having you wonderful poem making it through the first round, keep your pens flowing with passion. Wishing you all the best in the finals You are great.! love Leke

Date: 5/31/2010 1:55:00 PM

Congratulations on making it through the first round of the Poetry Soup contest with this poem. Best wishes in the finals. Karen

Anonymous Norman

Date: 5/31/2010 11:17:00 AM

If you allude one paradigm another will always catch you, if you forever live in the present then past and future cannot exist, the mindless fools are nothing but a reflection of ourselves :) I really liked this poem, well written, very well written, I liked the theme very much, the ramblings in this message reflect that :) pea's and love be with you

Kirsten Lindner

Date: 5/13/2010 8:19:00 PM

amazing poem!!!!!! Love it!

Susan Palli

Date: 5/13/2010 12:30:00 PM

Wonderful! Well written.

Anthony Amero

Date: 5/13/2010 11:40:00 AM

Am I glad I came across this today. I love this! "The mental crypt allows no release" We do get trapped in our own mind, thoughts, dreams - whatever - for a myriad of reasons. Well, I could go on about how I love this poem. I often write of the human condition and the mindless fools. I am going to read more of you. Thanks for this great write. Oh, congrats for being featured! Tony

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 5/13/2010 7:29:00 AM

Charlotte, just caught your poem of the week! Absolutely fantastic write. just loved it. Congrats on the feature..will have to read more of your poetry . God bless -Robert

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/13/2010 4:35:00 AM

Great write...Don't know exactly your thoughts when penned but I get the feel of regrets in life...Keep the creative pen flowing..Congratulations on being featured on the home page...Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/12/2010 3:13:00 AM

Congratulations on your featured write this week Charlotte. Love, Carol

Date: 5/11/2010 5:30:00 PM

Nice use of rhyme to share your thoughts. Much to think about here. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen

Brittany Moon

Date: 5/11/2010 11:52:00 AM

Congrats on you poem being featured this week...i love the truth in this poem...your first stanza is what caught my attention, and i just had to keep reading...great write, great you...God Bless and keep that pen flowing...~Brittany~

Janette Fisher

Date: 5/10/2010 1:54:00 PM

Many congrats on your featured piece this week. Rgds Janette

James Fraser

Date: 5/9/2010 2:37:00 PM

Congratulations on your fine poem being featured on the Soups Homepage >> James

Tim Ryerson

Date: 11/19/2009 5:46:00 AM

Beautifully done...I like the exact rhyming too...not easy to do. 'Brushing shoulders with mindless fools'...great line! - Tim