Star Sparked Eyes

He watched Eyes upon the sea He observed her movements Measuring her soul's momentum, He rose. He ran To her, ready Prompted by her appeal He knew the place to be and braved Her waves. Until He reached the spot, Where he felt he must be She rose high, he stood and rode her Steady. Went on Under her crest Stable on his surf board His hand touching lightly her wall, Surfed passed Before Her awesome wave Crashed, joyful sounds she made Proud, he swam to shore, sat, his eyes Star sparked. By CarolineCécile Copyright © 05.18.11

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The Fringe

Date: 6/1/2011 6:44:00 PM

Perhaps the waves are beliefs. If taken not too seriously, there is great joy to be found in them. If not, then religions are formed. To love the surf for the sake of comfort is........ well, where the star sparkling eyes come from. I hope you don't mind my crazy thoughts, but cool thoughts come into my little brain when reading your stuff. I like it :)

Matt Hunt

Date: 5/20/2011 4:15:00 PM

This is good. I have never surfed, but this makes me want too:) Great Job. R.M.

Caroline Cécile Delacroix
Date: 5/20/2011 4:28:00 PM

Thank you for your comment. I haven't surfed either. :) But have watched some incredible stunt. I imagine such people having a sort of relationship with the ocean. Thanks again. Caroline.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/19/2011 4:36:00 PM

Caroline, I tried surfing when I was young and was able to ride the waves on my knees on the surfboard. Your poem is so beautifully written. I love the way you personify the sea as a woman and the man feeling such joy as he catches "her" wave. Wish I could experience that as well, but I'm getting a little "long in the tooth" to try now. Exciting ride you took us on! Love, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/19/2011 10:39:00 AM

Creative and nice visual, caroline

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/19/2011 10:21:00 AM

Thank you for sharing your fabulous poetry today Caroline. It was a very interesting piece to read. Love, Carol

James Foulk

Date: 5/19/2011 10:18:00 AM

I have never seen anyone surf in person, but have seen many flilms of them also i am a big Beach Boys Fan. this was the type of poem that was like a flilm, where i could see everything you wrote. a great write. thank you for commenting on Tender Heart, yes it seems just like yesterday we were dating and 41 yers later, hard to believe.