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Went back to the house of my childhood, now abandoned! The rusty gate creaked open… found the once-cherished garden uncared for.. tall trees have grown taller, bushes have spread with no control, no flowers in sight - dahlias, and jinias, chrysanthemums! The swing is broken, tilting to one side! I decided to enter the house, Memory of a sweet past crippled my senses! The dusty staircase appeared in my view... an excellent structure made of Mahogany! My father chose the wood, paid more than he could afford! Probably he thought his family would live in this house for ever! No, that didn’t happen. One grim day, He had a heart-attack, he didn’t come back home! children who were often seen running up and down the staircase, were taken care of by the relatives, and moved to the city, They did not come back! Staircase remained a numb witness of the calamity! Notes: Mahogany is considered one of the most luxurious and beautiful woods in the world, and because of that, it tends to cost more money than other woods like oak or pine. April 10, 2023 Writing Challenge "S" word Poetry Contest Theme: Staircase Sponsor: Constance La France FIRST PLACE Open Poetry 6 Poetry Contest Sponsor: Charlotte Puddifoot

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Date: 4/14/2023 4:46:00 AM
Your poem brings such nostalgic memories . I too have the same story to tell of an abandoned home with creaking doors and loose hinges. It once stood as a mansion so proud and sweet where little feet endlessly climbed up and down the wooden staircase. Congratulations on your first place win dear Mala.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/14/2023 5:19:00 AM
Thank you, Dear Valsa. Your comments always inspire me. This house, where I lived only for a few years, is a huge part of my childhood. My father dreamed of living there among nature after retirement, but because of illness, he was unable to. Really appreciate your kind words. Love ~ Mala
Date: 4/13/2023 5:32:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the Contest...Malabika.
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/13/2023 4:08:00 PM
Thank you, Dear Poet. Appreciate your comment.
Date: 4/12/2023 3:24:00 PM
Mahogany is a beautiful hardwood. It stood longer than the daily - so sad. Congratulations on your win Mala! :)
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Date: 4/13/2023 4:07:00 PM
Thank you, Linda. Your lovely comment inspire me.
Date: 4/12/2023 1:07:00 PM
Mala~ I was walking into the house with you.mahogany is really beautiful.your Fathers untimely death is so well written as a narrative. I felt your sadness. Pangie
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/12/2023 2:59:00 PM
Thank you, Dear Dear Pangie. I draw inspiration for my poems mostly from my real-life experiences. My father was a pillar of strength for me. Really glad to share my thoughts with you - I am sure everyone has many stories of their lives. Hugs ~ Mala
Date: 4/12/2023 10:07:00 AM
Mala, thank you so much for sharing your poem in my Writing Challenge, congratulations !
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/12/2023 2:53:00 PM
Thank you, Constance. You are just inspiring!
Date: 4/12/2023 10:04:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a story/writes. I really enjoyed it. Have a blessed day writing away.............
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Date: 4/12/2023 9:55:00 AM
- Congratulations on 1st place in the contest, Mala :) - hugs
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/12/2023 2:52:00 PM
Thank you, Sunshine! Your comment is so precious!
Date: 4/10/2023 10:41:00 AM
Hello Mala, Thishouse you lived in in the past has a lot of memories for you. Good ones or bad.Just hold onto the good memories. Hugs. /Darlene\ Friendship & Love.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 4/12/2023 4:06:00 AM
Hello Mala, I am glad you have good memories of the old house where you use to live. Love & Friendship /Darlene/
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/11/2023 5:55:00 PM
Yes, Darlene, this house has a lot of memories for me - garden, swing, staircase! Thank you for your visit, Dear Friend. Love and Friendship ~ Mala
Date: 4/10/2023 8:09:00 AM
Sad to say abandoned houses do decay, remember your childhood home as it was back in the day. A lovely sentimental Free verse poem Malabika… Belle
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/11/2023 5:53:00 PM
Thank you, Belle. We lived in that house for a short time, but it is my most beautiful memory of childhood. Love ~ Mala
Date: 4/10/2023 6:29:00 AM
- A wonderful poem - Memories of a childhood home ... both in happy and sad days, Mala - Sad to find it abandoned and the beauty faded - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/10/2023 6:52:00 AM
Thank you, Sunshine! It’s a true story of my childhood. Really appreciate your thoughtful comment.

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