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Springtime's Promise

Cool showers gather on the side yard graced by tiny weeds and Swallowtails. March brings hope to dormant soil in an open field. Seeds now comforted settle in to begin their germination. This old, old story is retold, as birds repeat the joy of knowing it -- they, believers of the rite and ritual here. Chattering Creek still runs beyond the home-fence. "And Along We Go" reply the gliding fish. Their white skins aglow with sunlit sequin-scales arise from fading shadows, their bodies move in rhythm of the goal ahead. "We're On Our Way," they skim the water's rock. Farther out, browned hills lie in hope-- as well the dark soil primed for planting, a season of promise soon to be fulfilled. The evening sky sighs, then yields to greening mists--the wind dies down. among the shadows fish scales, bubbles and fish not so easily fooled (haibun)

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Date: 4/3/2021 12:18:00 PM
Great haibun! I won't be surprised if it wins that contest! Happy Christ Day tomorrow!
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Carol Louise Moon
Date: 4/5/2021 10:29:00 AM
I sure hope so. Happy Christ Day to you, Jennifer. I think God for sending Jesus!
Date: 3/31/2021 7:45:00 PM
Oh, this is so beautiful, Carol. Your exquisite imagery brings me to an intimacy with Nature in Spring. Skillfully rendered throughout, I especially admire you last line of prose; "the wind dies down." - the breeze dies when the sun goes down and the evening cools almost to a chill again, the glorious end to the warmth of a sunny Spring day - I feel all that from those four words, imagine what I feel from the rest of your poem. A splendid haibun, my inspiring friend. Best wishes for a win, dear poetess, and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan
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Carol Louise Moon
Date: 4/5/2021 10:31:00 AM
Thank you so much, Susan. I always value your feedback. God bless. Hugs...
Date: 3/30/2021 4:48:00 PM
Your imagery here has all the fresh promise of spring, I really like how the birds enjoy retelling the old story - for me the ritual of seeing the birds return to my backyard to eat all the plump worms is how I know spring has returned! Hope this does well in the contest!
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