Spring

Been a long time friend, the last time we spoke was spring things went wrong with us, Feel like a knife in my chest did not see the end this way. Francine Roberts Wow me in 5 lines contest tanka 5-7-5-7-7

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Robert Ball

Date: 4/27/2011 7:04:00 AM

Very good Cory, thank you for your comment my new found friend, your writes are not bad yourself, like this a lot, right now I'm prepping book #3 in my collection of ten books, so be happy and with the Lord everything is possible. You'll be a great one just hang in their, the Lord will be there for you always if you have faith in Him. with Him everything is possible, God bless

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/20/2011 2:16:00 PM

Cory, it's so painful to lose a friend. Maybe you can find a way to reconnect. That is my hope for you. Sad but meaningful tanka and I'm sending winning wishes your way. Love, Carolyn

Desiree M

Date: 4/20/2011 9:39:00 AM

It's really hard when we lose someone's friendship. Good luck 4 the contest

James Foulk

Date: 4/19/2011 5:53:00 PM

very good piece you wrote here, very creative nice flow to it.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/19/2011 5:29:00 PM

Emotional and lovely write Cory ..using spring in this way... broken friendships do make an everlasting impression luv..good luck in the contest... a stunning entry ..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/19/2011 3:16:00 PM

I really like this, Cory!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/19/2011 1:15:00 PM

Hi Cory, I am a Dr. of literature, used to teach English literature in a university long back. Glad to know you will be graduating with psychology, cory

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/19/2011 12:18:00 PM

Sad and touchy expression on the betrayal, cory. Good luck in the contest