Spoiled

Though her flesh was soft as moonlight, He found her soul a bleak midnight. Her sapphire eyes, banana sky, But she spoiled things like a fruit fly. He’s out of time, needs a bypass - Her body, shaped like an hourglass. 6/16/2023

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John Loving Iii

Date: 6/16/2023 4:08:00 PM

I'm still wondering. Short but a story still. And what kind of piece is it? couldnt understand.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/16/2023 6:50:00 PM

I have no idea if I did this form justice. I went along with the part where there is a displeasure of his lover. Thanks for reading, John!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/16/2023 11:35:00 AM

Good one. Each one with a contrast and not adding up so good for a great relationship. LOL..Thanks for sharing and for your visits. Sara

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/16/2023 1:25:00 PM

Thank you! Thought I would try this form :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/16/2023 11:31:00 AM

Your "SPOILED" is a creative write. I enjoyed it. Have a fun/blessed ~~ day/weekend..............

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/16/2023 1:25:00 PM

Thank you, Paula! Have a wonderful weekend!

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 6/16/2023 10:52:00 AM

Looks are not all. It is the heart that counts. Hugs.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/16/2023 1:25:00 PM

Yes! So true!

Lin Lane

Date: 6/16/2023 10:09:00 AM

Kim, I'm completely ignorant about this form and I'm not sure if I'm reading your intent correctly, but I suppose every reader can give their own perception. Time is hardly ever in our favor.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/16/2023 2:13:00 PM

With your keen poetic sense, Kim, I’m sure you have. ;-)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/16/2023 1:26:00 PM

First time trying this form! Hopefully I’ve done it justice, Lin.