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Sparrow On a Ledge

Sparrow on a ledge Needed help but told no one Vanished overnight Her smile now missed by neighbors Lights out again on Park Lane Foreclosure’s victim Few ever visited her Had we known her plight This senior we might have saved Elderly and abandoned *In honor of John's "Retread what you've said" contest

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Jack Horne

Date: 11/3/2020 12:15:00 PM

such a compassionate write here, hon

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 11/3/2020 1:46:00 PM

Our seniors deserve better, Jack. Thanks for reading!

John Freeman

Date: 12/17/2011 9:27:00 AM

Beauty is as beauty thinks as beauty speaks, Carolyn, Merry Christmas and may the new year bring much peace and happiness, Congrats on your thoughful verse, worthy of first place. Agape, Moses

Bob Quigley

Date: 12/17/2011 8:33:00 AM

A story re-lived every day unfortunately. This is an important reminder to us all Carolyn. Well done

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/17/2011 6:49:00 AM

yes so few would have helped even if they new..it's sad..even if they were asked few would help? Most simply see and look away. Congrad's Light & Love Happy Holy Days

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 12/17/2011 3:45:00 AM

Congratulations on your place x

Gwendolen Song

Date: 12/16/2011 1:04:00 PM

Such amazing mirroring stories, Carolyn. That is very nifty this type of tanka. A very special congrats on this win. John don't judge these contests carelessly...he knows you are the best! Enjoyed this poetry of yours AS ALWAYS. Luv, Gwendolen

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/16/2011 12:53:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement in Moses' "Retread" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/14/2011 11:18:00 PM

The poor thing, CArolyn. gosh, did this not place? It's very good.

John Loving Iii

Date: 11/13/2011 3:32:00 PM

pychopathic birds of prey.

Joe Maverick

Date: 11/13/2011 3:06:00 PM

A strongly focused write on a common and saddening abuse of vulnerable people in this scribe Carolyn...well captioned and shadowed:)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 11/13/2011 11:14:00 AM

Oh shucks, what a sad story, Carolyn...I think it's good though that you highlighted this sad plight of some elderly in your poem... hugs :)

Wilma Neels

Date: 11/12/2011 9:37:00 AM

I so love how you combined these two images and produced a thought provoking gem Carolyn, we sometimes forget to look beyond our own needs.. This is really beautiful and yet so sad as well.. all the best for Brian's contest, love wilma

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 11/12/2011 12:17:00 AM

Oh LNC...this is just awsome...The title just grabs you and is a perfect description...Ive been ill..lets talk soon. BG

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 11/11/2011 4:04:00 PM

very sad and close to home. Soup mail coming!

Daver Austin

Date: 11/11/2011 3:01:00 PM

You have to feel for those on the ledge, on the edge, especially in these times of smoke and ruin. Luck in the contest. Love, daver

Russell Sivey

Date: 11/11/2011 2:24:00 PM

Wow Carolyn, this is quite the deep write! Sad too, for the senior citizen! The world can be soooo cruel sometimes...really more times than not! It is so true that nobody noticed, that's the way it is anymore, sad. Wonderful work!!

Sarah Seraphin

Date: 11/11/2011 2:21:00 PM

* “I Wrote A Simple Verse Which Also Mentioned Being Atop A Ledge * My Dear Sweet Beautiful Carolyn * Twas Titled * SwitchBlade * Quite A Bit Removed From This Compassioned & Moving Poe * Give Her Precious Heart A Kiss * My Luv, Always * Sarah.” *

Tim B

Date: 11/11/2011 2:12:00 PM

People have become afraid to ask others for help, sad really, but a product of an entitlement environment, everyone supposes that the government will help and charity begins not in the heart but in Washington. Prayer is needed for us all, beautiful yet depressing poem Mrs. Carolyn. It sparks awareness though and that is its greatest gift.

Jack Horne

Date: 11/11/2011 1:29:00 PM

Sad piece, my friend. Was that the lady who lived on cat food? Gary Glitter, the guy in the glitter poem, turned out to be a child abuser. Horrid man.

Caryl Muzzey

Date: 11/11/2011 1:16:00 PM

So sad and so realistic Carolyn, a wonderful heartfelt Tanka. The best to you in the contest~ Caryl

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 11/11/2011 1:07:00 PM

Sad write on some real issues in our society... We can learn from people of wisdom.... wonderful tanka Carolyn and thanks agian for the conrats... love Michael