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Space that one I need to fill Now empty but like a bitter pill It’s hard to swallow it’s hard to accept The space left when from my heart you crept You crept away slowly through the years You left me with the unshed tears A cavernous space your legacy That’s what you left when you left me. But hold the press the story’s not told Another is now in my arms to hold The space is filled once more it seems The space you left when you stole my dreams. There is no space just room for two I know you didn’t mean to be untrue But life is harsh and it sometimes seems That space is there to make new dreams. © 25/02/2013 Contest Entry Work of fiction

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Date: 3/7/2013 12:27:00 AM
Beautiful and excellent piece,Mandy.lovely write.Congratulations on your superb win.Kudos to you great friend.
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Date: 3/6/2013 11:25:00 AM
A great write. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 3/5/2013 4:32:00 PM
congrats on your win Mandy
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Date: 3/5/2013 12:15:00 PM
Great poem! Thought provoking... and I agree with Caleb - those last two lines really were a "wow" moment for me! FABULOUS :)
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Date: 3/5/2013 8:48:00 AM
This is excellent. You really know how to end a poem. Nice Win!
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Date: 3/5/2013 4:53:00 AM
love your space, congrats
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Date: 3/5/2013 4:02:00 AM
Thanks for sharing, great poem.
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Date: 3/4/2013 7:24:00 PM
I hope your new dreams are wonderful...congratulations...
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:16:00 AM
They are Donna and thanks xx
Date: 3/4/2013 9:41:00 AM
Mandy,, congratulations with your wonderful space-going poem in Susan's contest...xox~PD
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:17:00 AM
Thanks Pd xx
Date: 3/4/2013 8:49:00 AM
this is amazing poetry, Mandy, congrats number one for me
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:17:00 AM
Thanks harry, you are such a support for me xx
Date: 2/27/2013 5:05:00 PM
Mandy, I really like how you did Susan's topic on space. VERY nice. And so, you think I am very solitary? I think maybe you are right!!
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:18:00 AM
I think you are a brick Andy and I think I told you once before lol (brick = something good) xx
Date: 2/27/2013 12:29:00 PM
I see so much character in these verses. There is always space for love and forgivness. Love where you took this from beginning heartache to a space for new dreams....
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:19:00 AM
Thanks for that Debra xx
Date: 2/27/2013 12:52:00 AM
sadness to happiness, such positivity.. lovely Mandy...
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:19:00 AM
Thanks harry, i always try to be poitive xx
Date: 2/26/2013 1:44:00 PM
Hi Mandy glad it all went well for you, I like family gatherings....David
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:20:00 AM
Thanks David xx
Date: 2/26/2013 4:36:00 AM
I really like the use of space in your poem. "Another is now in my arms." Space is filled not only within the heart but in the arms. Nicely done Mandy. Best wishes in the contest. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:21:00 AM
Thanks Connie, you always send warm smiles luv and I appreciate them xx
Date: 2/25/2013 8:29:00 PM
great write Mandy...winning wishes
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:20:00 AM
Thanks Joseph xx
Date: 2/25/2013 3:00:00 PM
Wonderful story even if it is fiction..good luck
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:21:00 AM
Thanks Donna xx
Date: 2/25/2013 2:56:00 PM
love it, mandy! best of luck in the contest - this sounds like a winner to me.
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:22:00 AM
Thanks Ilene xx
Date: 2/25/2013 12:55:00 PM
Very nice, Mandy! Sad but deep... Terry
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Date: 3/5/2013 2:15:00 AM
Thanks Terry xx
Date: 2/25/2013 11:34:00 AM
Mandy well done I like it....any black eyes? lol.....David
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Date: 2/25/2013 11:44:00 AM
Hi and thanks David, not a black eye in sight a wonderful evening all rounds thanks, truly amazing xx
Date: 2/25/2013 11:29:00 AM
MANDY!!!!! Every line is so so replete with meaning and wonder! I LOVED THIS! Going into my favorites! :) Just a little observation...second stanza...third line, shouldn't that read YOUR legacy? ;)
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Date: 2/25/2013 11:33:00 AM
Thanks Eileen I have put it right and thanks for the eagle eye xx
Date: 2/25/2013 11:02:00 AM
great words Hun....Seren
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Date: 2/25/2013 11:33:00 AM
hi sass I'm just about back in action xx

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