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Southern Tradition

Southern Tradition

Daddy didn't look at them as they 
passed by
August illuminating unkempt hair 
worn-out hand-me-downs
a woman and her four children
walking in the road 
to avoid the sidewalk on our side.

I see her every day
but she doesn't have time
to see me, ebony eyes
too busy watching  babies
crying over the hot asphalt

Daddy spits and shakes his head.
' Too sorry to buy a car!'

Years later a muddy red boot print
graces our front door
A gift from a long grown child
(confident as a ghost who's never 
been seen)
in exchange for the tv  in the trunk
of a car his Mama never had

Daddy spits and shakes his head.
' Well look at where they come from!'

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  1. Date: 12/26/2013 12:33:00 AM
    Renee, , Hope you are enjoying the holidays, -- Your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers!! Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND". Hugs* SKAT"

  1. Date: 12/19/2013 12:13:00 PM
    You did very well expressing this unfortunate theme in your own, distinct manner and voice. The way this poem ends has a strong effect, because it sort of loops everything back to the beginning with the Father's ingrained attitude which is one of the very things which keeps this cycle going.

    Lee Avatar Renee Lee
    Date: 12/19/2013 3:45:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks. I'm never quite certain whether what makes sense in my brain will actually translate in the minds of others. This kind of feedback is the main reason I started posting here. Thanks for reading. :)
  1. Date: 12/18/2013 5:39:00 PM
    Renee would you please help me understand your poem? I feel I am missing what you are sharing :)

    Thomas Avatar FJ Thomas
    Date: 12/18/2013 8:58:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Ahhh thank you so much; I lost my understanding at the part about the son...amazing how it's so obvious now :) Thank goodness for the poor mothers who did instill the need of good grades in school and the pride of being able to hold a job. It has always been rougher here in the south...unfortunately the bad stand out more than the good.
    Lee Avatar Renee Lee
    Date: 12/18/2013 6:33:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    It's basically about how racism and discrimination affects society as a whole. "Daddy" sees the woman as beneath him, and chooses to ignore her, which only serves to propel the cycle of violence and poverty as one of her children grows up and robs his house. Thanks for reading. :)
  1. Date: 12/18/2013 2:43:00 PM
    Renee, enjoyed...,, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. Dropping by to invite you to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* -Looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@

    Lee Avatar Renee Lee
    Date: 12/18/2013 6:34:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks! I'll definitely check out your contest.
  1. Date: 12/18/2013 2:05:00 PM
    - Welcome to P-Soup, Renee ! - Nice to read your first poem here.:)) - Hope you will have much pleasure to be with us. - Wishing you good luck - have a nice day! - (Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours). - My first greeting to you from Norway. - I will come back to read more.... another day :) - oxox / /Anne-Lise :)

    Lee Avatar Renee Lee
    Date: 12/18/2013 6:35:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for being the first to welcome me, and for taking the time to read. :)