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Someone Who Used To Be You

When splendor of love spun dreams ecstatic Musings of fantasy waltzed joyous themes On blossoms of meadows in prime of spring And giggles of streams donning green prairies I felt your presence my eager beats crooned When halo of the moon ravished our mood As melodic rhythms inflamed doting hearts And voice of hot passion blazed our romance You were sweet life that I cheerfully claimed And I was to you what your triumph meant But feelings euphoric soon lost their edge When in winds of change vows of youth drifted I saw you go there where lonesome souls cry Where emotions despised strife of pale sighs When day’s silence often filled awkward void And haze of nights we spent gazing gray skies When dawns soon arose enveloped in shroud Love too got masked, cloaked in stygian clouds And allure, once acclaimed, began to fade As contempt of sameness dwindled our flames As you leave this dream, dear, you know it too No longer the birds choose to croon your tune They are searching someone they loved and knew The one they once wooed, who used to be you January 27, 2021 Poem of the day on January 28, 2020 Placed 1st: Watered-down juice poetry contest Sponsor: Edward Ibeh Ten syllables per line (howmanysyllables.com)

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Date: 7/28/2022 7:20:00 AM
I understand that this poen is a triple winner ! I am not at all surprised ! This is such a gem of a poem stating how allure, once acclaimed fades and the flame of love dwindles with the passage of time. Beautifully presented in your inimitable style, Vijay!
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Date: 2/26/2021 2:16:00 AM
This is beautiful! I don't think I have seen your poems before but I am speechless. This is a masterpiece. Faving it for sure! Congratulations on your top placement in the best new poems list, very much deserved.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/26/2021 4:56:00 AM
Glad you stopped by with your lovely comments, BJ. Much appreciate your visit--many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.
Date: 2/25/2021 10:51:00 PM
Wow! Such a good read and congratulations!
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Date: 2/26/2021 4:55:00 AM
Much appreciate Beryl--many thanks.
Date: 2/23/2021 2:44:00 PM
Congratulations on you top win, Vijay.. Really enjoyed your exquisite masterpiece.. Absolutely breathtaking! Many blessings my friend..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/24/2021 12:10:00 PM
Much appreciate your visit and comments, Robertina--many thanks.
Date: 2/23/2021 12:19:00 PM
All my best and glad I opened to read your poem a lovely dedication to “someone who used to be...your sweet life.
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Date: 2/23/2021 2:42:00 PM
Thank you Josefina--much appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 2/22/2021 4:42:00 AM
Back to say congrats Vijay on being top of the best poems list. Tom
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/22/2021 5:27:00 AM
Thank you Tom. Much appreciate your return visit.
Date: 2/21/2021 5:10:00 PM
My heartiest congrats to you on having your poem top the list of New Best Poems. What an honor; but what a poem, also!!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/22/2021 5:26:00 AM
Much appreciate your visit and kind remarks. Many, many thanks.
Date: 2/21/2021 9:58:00 AM
Congratulations on having this wonderful poem at the top of her new best poems list my friend! Blessings xxoo
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/21/2021 2:04:00 PM
Thank you Connie--much appreciate my friend. Hope you are doing well.
Date: 2/19/2021 5:58:00 AM
Vijay, HUGE CONGRATS on your top win and on being 1st place on 100 best new poems... I’m smiling for you my friend :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/19/2021 7:21:00 AM
Thank you my friend for stopping by again with your delightful comments. Always a joy, when you visit.
Date: 2/15/2021 4:12:00 AM
You have achieved the triple Crown with this beautiful write Vijay, Congrats on reaching Number 1 on the best new poem list! So very well deserved!! Happy Monday !
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/15/2021 6:45:00 AM
So very kind of you Mike. Much appreciate--many thanks.
Date: 2/11/2021 5:42:00 AM
Brilliant poem with a top win!! Congrats Vijay!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/11/2021 2:14:00 PM
Thank you Krish--much appreciate.
Date: 2/8/2021 9:06:00 PM
Beautifully penned Vijay! Congratulations on your win!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/10/2021 7:34:00 AM
Much appreciate Smita--many thanks.
Date: 2/8/2021 2:31:00 PM
I see this is very high on the best new poems list as well. Big congrats, Vijay.
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Date: 2/10/2021 7:33:00 AM
Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.
Date: 2/2/2021 1:03:00 PM
Congratulations Vijay Pandit on POTD...Another sweet write from a bountiful tree...
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Date: 2/2/2021 2:32:00 PM
Thank you Arturo--much appreciate.
Date: 2/2/2021 10:09:00 AM
A belated Congratulations for this lovely POTD poem Vijay. It is difficult to keep up these days. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 2/2/2021 2:32:00 PM
Thank you Connie. Much appreciate. Please take care of yourself--hope you will find some relief as time goes by.
Date: 2/1/2021 11:43:00 AM
a top win and potd, many congrats Vijay sorry i missed commenting on this gem sooner:-( hugs jan xx
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2021 1:30:00 PM
Much appreciate Jan. So very kind of you to stop by with your lovely feedback. Many many thanks.
Date: 2/1/2021 9:34:00 AM
"Contempt of Sameness" might have been your metaphoric title! You so aptly portray the erosion that exists when one loses the appreciation of heart. So beautiful Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2021 9:46:00 AM
Much appreciate Lonna--many many thanks.
Date: 2/1/2021 7:00:00 AM
A double win, impressive on both counts. I’m pleased to see you honoured in this way. Congrats Rick.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2021 9:45:00 AM
Thank you Richard--much appreciate.
Date: 2/1/2021 4:37:00 AM
Wow! Congrats! So delightful and delighting from the start til the end... especially this line I can relate to: "When in winds of change vows of youth drifted..." Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2021 5:50:00 AM
Glad you stopped by Beata. Much appreciate--many thanks for the kind remarks.
Date: 1/31/2021 6:23:00 PM
Back again to congratulate you on your top win! This poem, already a favourite, is simply superb! :)
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Date: 2/1/2021 5:49:00 AM
Thank you US--much appreciate your return visit and treasure your FAVE..
Date: 1/31/2021 3:29:00 PM
Hi Vijay, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your top win. It was well deserved. Have a good evening:-) Alexis
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2021 5:48:00 AM
Thank you my friend--much appreciate.
Date: 1/31/2021 12:58:00 PM
Congrats on your wonderful win :) God bless you with much love and many prayers, Gina
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2021 1:27:00 PM
Thank you Gina--much appreciate your return visit.
Date: 1/31/2021 12:14:00 PM
Coming back with another "Congratulations" on this win. I enjoyed reading it again. Today, enjoy your win with blessings................
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2021 1:27:00 PM
Thank you for your return visit, Paula--much appreciate.
Date: 1/31/2021 11:51:00 AM
Now I can see why this masterpiece won you POTD, Vijay. Outstanding! Heartiest congratulations on your first place win in my contest! I have to FAV this....
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2021 1:26:00 PM
A special treat from you to receive a FAVE, Edward. Much appreciate your kind remarks. Many thanks for your comments and many more for holding contests.
Date: 1/30/2021 8:08:00 PM
VJ...Your pen is on fire!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2021 4:24:00 AM
Glad you stopped by Chuck. Much appreciate--many thanks.
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